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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:48:40 GMT 5
Ek tuti phooti si choti si nadaar si majhool si
Wahhh
hamari bhi qabool ho
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:46:23 GMT 5
Arshad Saheb
aaj bas aap ka kalam hi parhey ja raha hun aur afsos ho raha hay ke aaj tak mehroom kaisey raha
bohat achey aur khayal angez ashaar aap ke dil ko chu jaaney waaley
is sher mein aap ney "kandha" likha hay jis sey wazan mein ( meri naqis raaey mein) kuch gerber ho rahi hay....aur waisey bhi merey khayal mein sahi lafz "kaandha" hay aur wo use karen tow wazan bhi sahi rahey ga
ye siraf meri naqis raaey hay....aur wazeh rahey ke mujhey funn-e shaeri ki abjad sey waqfiaat naheen hay.....is liye intezar rahey ga sukhanwar hazrat ki raaey ka..
meri janib sey bohat si daad hazir hay...qabool fermaaiye
Khaksar
Qamar Kon aaey ga meri laash ko kaandha dene teri shadi mein magar sara zamana ho ga
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:39:04 GMT 5
Kon kehta hay zamaney mein wafa baqi hay ab tow duniya mein faqat nam-e Khuda baqi hay
wah Arshad saheb....bohat acha matla' hay....
Ho gaya hun kis jungle ki tarah meiN weeran meri aankhoN mein magar khawab tera baqi hay
bohat khub....bara acha khayal baandha hay aap ney
Ret sehra ki huN mein, tum ho hawaaoN jaisi Mere seeney pe tera nam likha baqi hay
acha takhayul hay lekin ager isey yun ke rlen tow meri naqis raaey mein zor peda ho ga:
Ret sehra ki huN mein, tum ho hawaaoN jaisi Phir bhi seeney pe tera nam likha baqi hay
kyunke usually hawa sey ret ur jaya kerti hay aur likha hua mit jaya kerta hay mager aap keh rahey hain ke tera nam is qadar gehra likha hay ke ret mein honey ke bawajood hawa sey naheen mita.
aur ye sher bohat lutf dey gaya:
Teri yaaden haiN ke merham hay mere zakhmoN ka mit gaey zakhm sabhi aur dawa baqi hay
wah......
bohat si daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:27:32 GMT 5
Zaki Saheb
Bohat khub
Bohat achi, murassa aur pur acer ghazal kahi aap ney
Ek Arz hay.....shayad aap behter samajhtey hon magar jahan tak meri naqis raaey ka taluq hay......
sher number 2 ke pehley misrey mein aap ney likha hay:
"meri misal hay sookhey nehar pe pul jaaisi"
mere khayal mein "nehar" muannas istemal ki jaati hay...shayad ghalat khayal ho....
lekin ager mein sahi samajhta hun tow misra yun hona chaiye"
"meri misal hay sookhi nehar pe pul Jaisi"
baqi kya sahi hay kya ghaalat wo tow aap, Razi aur doosrey sukhanwar hazraat hi behter samajh saktey hain........meri naqis raaey mein ney pesh ker di hay.......
majmooi taur per bohat achi ghazal ke liye bohat si daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:16:49 GMT 5
Wah Sara ji
Bohat achi ghazal ata ki aap ney
Daad qabool ki jiye
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 29, 2008 11:55:59 GMT 5
Ghazal Saheba
Bohat achi ghazal aap ki
khubsoorat khayalaat....munfarid mazameen..
Rafi saheb aur Atif Bhai ki baat sahi hay
Sher mein Ham ker deney sey problem solve ho jati hay
Aur mein bhi wohi arz kerney wala tha jo Atif bhai ney kaha ke Maqta mein problem hay
us ka hal bhi unhon ney bara acha diya hay....aagey aap ki merzi...ghazal aap ki..kalam aap ka
Tahira Saheba ney shayad ziyada ghaur naheen kiya....
Kaa'ba wo der bana liya hum ney ......hi meri daanist mein aap kehna chahti theen aur ye typo naheen hay............bohat acha misra hay ye tow.
Meri janib sey ek bohat achi kavish per dili daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 29, 2008 11:41:54 GMT 5
Us ki nazren theen ajnabi werna Mein tow kuch duur hi khara tha alag Wah Qamar Sahib bahut khoob.......... Bahut sari daad qabool farmaeay.......Sada khush raheay......... Zaki Saheb aap jaisey achey shaer ki ye daad bohat qeemti hay mere liye. ghazal ki pasandeedgi ka shukria. Khaksar Qamar
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 29, 2008 11:29:49 GMT 5
Aqeel saheb
Halaat-e hazira ka bayan shaaer ki zuban mein
aap ney haq ada ker dia saheb.
Daad hazir hay
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 29, 2008 11:27:12 GMT 5
Aqeel saheb
Bohat achi ghazal ata ki aap ney
bohat khub
dili daad ke saath
Khaksar
Qamar
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Post by zehrab on Sept 29, 2008 11:24:20 GMT 5
Bohat khub Aqeel saheb
aaj pehli bar shayad aap ka kalam parha aur afsos hua apni mehroomi per ke kaisey itney arsey mein aap ke kalam sey ghafil raha,..............
ek bohat achi ghazal ke liye dgeron daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 12:10:42 GMT 5
Saeed Saheb
Aaj pehli baar aap ka kalam parha aur parhta hi chala gya
afsos hua ke kyun mein itna arsa aisey kalam sey mehroom raha
Noshi ka kehna sahi hay...waqaee Faraz aur Faiz ki khushbu aati hay aap ke kalam sey
aur Noshi ney naheen kaha magar khud Noshi Gailani ke kayee ashaar bhi yaad aa gaey aap ki shaeri parh ker........
ek bohat achi ghazal ke liye meri janib sey bhi ye haqeer si daad qabool ki jiye
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 12:04:35 GMT 5
Razi Bhai
Wah wah
aap hamesha achootey radeef o qafia per likhtey hain
aam rah sey hat ker
bohat dilkash andaz hay aap ka
ltf aa gaya saheb................lekin ager gustakhi na samjhen tow ek arz hay:
is sher mein:
yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain
misra-e sani mein "jhonka dey rahey hain" per nazr-e sani ki zaroorat hay meri naqis raaey mein
Jhonka aata hay...diya naheen jaata....dhakka diya jata hay........kam az kam mere ilm mein tow aisi koi misal naheeN hay........shayad aap behter jaantey hoN......
Ek bohat achi aur hasb-e haal ghazal ke liye bohat si daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 11:55:28 GMT 5
Wah Wah
Bohat khub Rafi saheb
Lutf aa gaya
daad hazir hay
Khaksar
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 11:52:39 GMT 5
Wah Ramish Ji
Bohat pur acer......bohat rawaN aur dil ko chu jaaney wali ghazal ata ki aap ney
Lutf aa gaya
Daad hazir hay
Qamar
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zehrab
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 11:42:39 GMT 5
Nasir saheb
Razi ney bohat acha kiya ke hamen aap sey mutaarif kerwa diya..
khub likhtey hain aap hazoor....................
lekin Razi ki tarah kuch ashaar per achanbha mujhey bhi hua tha..
mein samjha shayad typo hua hoga zaroor......
ba haciyat-e majmooi bohat aala ghazal tehreer ki aap ney
daad hazir hay....
Khaksar
Qamar
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