zaki
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Post by zaki on Sept 29, 2008 14:06:10 GMT 5
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Post by Tanweer on Sept 29, 2008 18:59:02 GMT 5
Zaki saheb!
Aik achi kawish aapki, daad samaitiey.
Faq't Tanweer
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Sept 29, 2008 19:19:25 GMT 5
ahaaaaaaaaa wahhhhh bohat khoob
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zaki
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Post by zaki on Sept 30, 2008 10:28:15 GMT 5
Zaki saheb! Aik achi kawish aapki, daad samaitiey. Faq't Tanweer Bahut Shukria Tanveer Sahib...........
Sada Khush Raheay.............
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zaki
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Post by zaki on Sept 30, 2008 10:32:21 GMT 5
ahaaaaaaaaa wahhhhh bohat khoob Salam Rafi Tabasum Sahib........
Hosla afzai farmanay ka bahut shukria.....
Sada Khush Raheay.........
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zehrab
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ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 30, 2008 11:27:32 GMT 5
Zaki Saheb
Bohat khub
Bohat achi, murassa aur pur acer ghazal kahi aap ney
Ek Arz hay.....shayad aap behter samajhtey hon magar jahan tak meri naqis raaey ka taluq hay......
sher number 2 ke pehley misrey mein aap ney likha hay:
"meri misal hay sookhey nehar pe pul jaaisi"
mere khayal mein "nehar" muannas istemal ki jaati hay...shayad ghalat khayal ho....
lekin ager mein sahi samajhta hun tow misra yun hona chaiye"
"meri misal hay sookhi nehar pe pul Jaisi"
baqi kya sahi hay kya ghaalat wo tow aap, Razi aur doosrey sukhanwar hazraat hi behter samajh saktey hain........meri naqis raaey mein ney pesh ker di hay.......
majmooi taur per bohat achi ghazal ke liye bohat si daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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zaki
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Post by zaki on Sept 30, 2008 15:26:36 GMT 5
Zaki Saheb Bohat khub Bohat achi, murassa aur pur acer ghazal kahi aap ney Ek Arz hay.....shayad aap behter samajhtey hon magar jahan tak meri naqis raaey ka taluq hay...... sher number 2 ke pehley misrey mein aap ney likha hay: "meri misal hay sookhey nehar pe pul jaaisi" mere khayal mein "nehar" muannas istemal ki jaati hay...shayad ghalat khayal ho.... lekin ager mein sahi samajhta hun tow misra yun hona chaiye" "meri misal hay sookhi nehar pe pul Jaisi" baqi kya sahi hay kya ghaalat wo tow aap, Razi aur doosrey sukhanwar hazraat hi behter samajh saktey hain........meri naqis raaey mein ney pesh ker di hay....... majmooi taur per bohat achi ghazal ke liye bohat si daad Khaksar Qamar Qamar Sahib mein apka bahut mashkore hon keh app ne mujhe parha aur apne arr'a se bhi nawaza ....... mera iss site ko joine karne ka maqsad bhi yahi tah keh mein app sab doston se seekhon...... Muhje bahut khushi hui hai keh app ne mujhe waqt dia aur apne kheyalat ka izhar bhi kia...... Mein umeed karta hon keh app aainda bhi apni qeemti arr'a se mujhe nawaztay rahein gay.......
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Post by Sukhanwar on Oct 2, 2008 9:00:21 GMT 5
"meri misal hay sookhi nehar pe pul Jaisi" arshad aik to is ghazal main yehi ghalati hy jo qamar sahab nay bataai is k saath sath aap nay isi misray main lafz nehr ko nehar istamal kia hy jo drust nahin lafz nehr ko lehr kay wazan par istamal kijiay teesray shair ka pehla misra bhi check kijiay gira na deeda e namnaak sy is misray main na ka istamal aap nay drust nahin kia yeh na alif k saath hy aap k misray main zaroorat hay walay na ki hy teri riazat e shab bhar ka ik husool hoon main
yeh misra drust hay laykin is main jo lafz main bold kiay woh izaafi hain isay dobara kahain ghazal ka matla khoobsooart hay aap isi tara kehtay rahain yeh kuch khaamian hain jald door ho jaain gee asak baat yeh hoti hy k aap ki tabiat main rawani hy ya nahin aur aap ki tabiat rawan hy shair aap wazan main kehtay hain khush rahiay thanx razi
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zaki
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Post by zaki on Oct 20, 2008 13:50:12 GMT 5
"meri misal hay sookhi nehar pe pul Jaisi" arshad aik to is ghazal main yehi ghalati hy jo qamar sahab nay bataai is k saath sath aap nay isi misray main lafz nehr ko nehar istamal kia hy jo drust nahin lafz nehr ko lehr kay wazan par istamal kijiay teesray shair ka pehla misra bhi check kijiay gira na deeda e namnaak sy is misray main na ka istamal aap nay drust nahin kia yeh na alif k saath hy aap k misray main zaroorat hay walay na ki hy teri riazat e shab bhar ka ik husool hoon main yeh misra drust hay laykin is main jo lafz main bold kiay woh izaafi hain isay dobara kahain ghazal ka matla khoobsooart hay aap isi tara kehtay rahain yeh kuch khaamian hain jald door ho jaain gee asak baat yeh hoti hy k aap ki tabiat main rawani hy ya nahin aur aap ki tabiat rawan hy shair aap wazan main kehtay hain khush rahiay thanx razi Razi sahab bahut bahtu shukria app ne meri rehnumaai farmaaii hai...... sada khush raheay...
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neha
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Post by neha on Oct 20, 2008 16:31:14 GMT 5
Zaki sahab,
Bohut khubsurat ghazal lagi ...tamam ash'aar acchay lagay...mery taraf se daad qubool kijye.
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zaki
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Post by zaki on Oct 23, 2008 15:17:50 GMT 5
Zaki sahab, Bohut khubsurat ghazal lagi ...tamam ash'aar acchay lagay...mery taraf se daad qubool kijye. Neha Ji Bahut shukria hosla afzaai farmanay ka ......
Sada khush raheay.......
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Post by dr.najma shaheen on Nov 14, 2008 20:40:02 GMT 5
kh jaisay kuch bhi nahin safar ki dhool hun main
waaaaah zaki sahib bahut khoob
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Post by Atif Mirza on Nov 18, 2008 19:43:37 GMT 5
Durustgi ki tajweez 1:- "Meri misaal hai sookhi nadi peh pul jaisi" Durustgi ki tajweez 2:- "Gira na deeda-e-namnaak say abhi mujh ko" maiN nah Urdu Image maiN bhi durust hai aur matlab kay etibar say bhi theek hai. Durustgi ki tajweez 3:- "Teri riyazat-e-shab bhar ka ik husool hooN maiN" maiN shab bhar tau theek hai kissi hudd tak magar Ik waqee izafi hai. Iss per aap khud sochiay.
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jooni
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Post by jooni on Nov 18, 2008 23:48:44 GMT 5
Zaki Sahib, Boht Khoob.
Daad qubool kijiye.
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Nov 25, 2008 19:20:27 GMT 5
Zaki sahab ap ki ghazal meiN craft ka jo tareeqa hay wo jadeed hay aur isi craft ko barqarar rakhty hoeay agay ka safar jari rakheay jin batoN par Razi sahab nay comment kia hay un say mujhy itifaq hay aik nazar dobara daikhnay say ap ki ghazal ki nashist o barkhaast umda hojeay gi
aqeel
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