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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 8, 2007 20:35:03 GMT 5
Saltanat Khaab ki sjatay kia neend apni grift maiN kb thee daam e gandum to ik bhana tha hasiyat kuch bahisht maiN kab thee kia khoobsorat aur rawan ashaar hein tang qafeay mein dad hazir hay qabooleay ga
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 8, 2007 20:23:20 GMT 5
bahut khoob maza aya,wah
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 4, 2007 21:03:51 GMT 5
ab myri raey qadray mukhtalif hay, is nazm mein bahut ziada editing ki zaroorat hay kiun kae aik misray bahut dheelay hein chust bandisg aur nibhao ka aqreena is ko khoobsorat bana sakta hay magar filwaqt kamzoor misrooN ki maujodgi meiN us tarha nahi dekha jasakta jis tarha ap kay us tukray ko dekha gia tha
aqeel malik
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 5, 2007 12:43:32 GMT 5
bhai qalam dost aor bhai aqeel....adaab aap dono ne tawajjah se meri ghazal ** mujh ko mera yaqeen..........** perhi.iss baat ke lie aap ki momnoon o mashkoor hoon. Aqeel bhai aap ne ek shair ke bare me usse rewrite kerne ki baat ki hai..agr ye shair hai ke.....binayi mujh se chiin ke yun le gaya koi.....to is silsile me arzz hai ke mmere majmoye me jo kuch bhi hai usse janab JAWED MANZAR sb ki aslah ke baad hi printing ke merhale se guzra hai.waise ager aap iss silsile me rahnumaai fermaayeN to khushii ho gi. wassalam Neelofar Neelofer sahiba! baat ye hay ke koe bhi shair ho aur koe bhi lafz bandhay us ki sanad behr hal asatiza kay han say li ja sakti hay ap Javed Manzae sahab say is lafz ki sehat aur asatiza kay han say koe sanad lay lein tu ziada munasib rahay ga is tarha na sirf ap ki balkeh hamari bhi rehnumae ho jaeay. aqeel
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 4, 2007 16:07:15 GMT 5
soocha tha tum se door nikal jaoNgi mger dekha to har moqaam teri rhguzar lga
Nelofar Sahiba
ghazal ka matalia kia ..........darj bala sher acha laga aik aur jagah ap nay pahar bandha hay jo mehl e nazar hay us sher ko rewrite karny ki zarorat hay majmooe taur par ghazal behtar lagi
aqeel
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 4, 2007 16:14:30 GMT 5
bahut kamzoor nazm hay is ko mazeed mehnat say likhnay ki zaroorat hay
aqeel malik
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 2, 2007 21:44:31 GMT 5
ap ka andaz is ghazal mein acha hay magar riwaati hay, ap ka jauhar jo nazm mein dekha us tanazur mein ghazal riwaat say hat kar koe mana nahi day rahi bilkul samnay kay ashaar hein,khaas kar taza nishtar ka chaloN par Masdar lgna kay sath ko nibho nahi ban paya isi tarha mor aur raqs wala wazn mein tu zaroor hein magar shar nahi ban paya han Ahmed Fraz ki taqleed mein ap nay maqta khoob nibhaya hay JANAn JANAn! aur ap ka Naina Naina
aqeel
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 3, 2007 17:02:27 GMT 5
khalid sahab
khoobsoraat aur lateef mazahia andaz hay ghazal ka dad qabooleay
aqeel
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 2, 2007 21:33:58 GMT 5
N@ina!
ap ki nazm ka matalia kia,aik khamosh nadi ki tarha behti hoe ghazal aur shaiyad jis behr mein likhi us ka bhi asar yaqeenan hoga kiun k us ka flow bhi nadi kay pani ki tarha rawan hota hay,nazm na'rasae kay us kachay rasty say guzarti mehsoos hoti hay jis par barish barasnay kay baad mehak ati hay, bawajood is kay ke nazm ka majmoe tasur acha hay magar ibtadae 4 satrein nazm kay is husn aur aik khas fiza ko gehna rahi hein in par nazr e sani chaheay
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 23, 2007 17:51:15 GMT 5
ap ki muhabat hay tanweer sahab
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 17, 2007 14:07:16 GMT 5
aqeel sahab bhoht khoob. insha allah aik do din tak hum is ka matla bhi perhain ge. hain na? zagham abidi matla abhi lejeay sahab apni palkooN pe sitarooN ko saja lay gaey ham kasa e hijr say ko kuch bhi mila,lay gaey ham!
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 15, 2007 20:42:37 GMT 5
[/quote]Assalaam o alaikum aqeel saahib
kaisay haiN AAP?
aapki peshkarda ghazal bahut acchee hai
hamaari dilee daad qubool farmaayeN aapki is dilkash kaavish per
allah(sbhnwt)karay zoray qalam aur ziyaadah
mukhlis haamidbaaqari[/color][/b][/quote]
ap ki bahut sari duaoN ka shukr guzar hoN
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 10, 2007 15:36:36 GMT 5
Aqeel saHib salaam arz hai aap ke makhsoos tarz-e-takallum meiN aap ki ye ghazal bahot pasand aayee. meri jaanib se daad qubool keejiye. matla' bhi hota to lutf dobaala ho jaata. Amjad Amjad sahab W'alaikum assalam! kafi arsay kay baad ap nazar aeay,ap nay ghazal ka matalia kia ap ka shukria,warna banda is qabil kahaN
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 3, 2007 16:48:07 GMT 5
mohtaram aqeel malik sb aadaab!
hameisha ki tarah aik munfarid tareeqey se aap ne ghazal kahi hai! mujh meiN un technical baatoN ko ujaager kerne kee salaahiyat nahiN hai jo maiN mehsoos kerta hooN ke aap ne qavaafi meiN istemaal fermaii haiN lekin jo bhi kaha khoob aur ber mehel kaha! daad qubool keeje!
khaalid! khalid sahab ap ka bahut shukria ke ap nay raey ka izhar kia aur is ghazal ko samjhnay ki koshish ki
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 3, 2007 16:43:43 GMT 5
chalo behtar kisi pehloo to sambhalay gaay hum aqeel sahib aap ki is ghazal k saath jo tareekh darj hy woh bohat baamaani hy mera khyaal hy sab ko yeh ghazal usi date k tanazur main parhni chaahiay aur saath main yeh bhi sochna chaahiay k agar shair ny ghazal k saath date bhi likhi hy to kion likhi hy kion k maazi main to us ny kabhi aysa nahin kia ghazal ko ko us k syaaq o sabaaq main parhain to bohat lutf dayti hy khaas taur par main maqtay ki baat kar raha hoon thanx razi Razi sb! ap nay bilkul darust ishara kia ke kisi bhi tehreer ko siaq o sabaq kay hawalay say parha jaey tu lutf barh jata hay turra ye ke ap nay misra bhi khoob qoute kia bahut shukria ap ka
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