Shaheen
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 31, 2007 8:50:53 GMT 5
Wah Khalid Sahib! Aap Haalaat-e-Hazira kay shaer haiN!
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 31, 2007 8:54:25 GMT 5
Aray wah kamal hai!
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 27, 2007 15:59:47 GMT 5
Wah Jee Wah!
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 24, 2007 19:34:06 GMT 5
GUZARISHAAT Kha nahiN sakti akailay aam begum Dhoondti hai guthliyoN kay daam begum
Bailna matt marna sar per meray yooN Ho na jaay zindagi ki shaam begum
Baithnay day abb mujhay aaraam say too Kar chuka hooN ghar ka sara kaam begum
Jang si barpa hai roz-o-shab yahaN per Yeh hamara ghar hai ya hai laam begum
MaiN nay tau rakhkhi nahiN P A koi bhi Yeh hai bus tera khayal-e-khaam begum
MuddatoN say jaib khali hai meri tau Bhool ja ab saRhiyoN kay daam begum
Dard say bharpoor mairay qehqahay haiN Kar raha hooN yeh bhi tairay naam begumAtif Mirza ____________________________________________________ Laam = Maidan-e-Jang PA = Personal Assistent Kia guzarishaat hain mirza jee! Kia koi qabool bhi huwi hai ya yak tarfa karwai hai?
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 17, 2007 15:43:57 GMT 5
Wah Atif Mirza Sahib Bohot achchi ghazl kahi hai aap ne. Aap ki yah baat bohot achhi lagi keh aap ne Khalid Sahib ka mashwaray ko tasleem kia. Aik bar aap nay Hasib Rana ka mashwara bhi qabool kia. Aap ka dil bohot bara lagta hai keh jaldi say apni ghalti tasleem kar ke durustgi kar letay hain. Allah aap ki iss khoobsoorat shaeri ko aur achchi karay. Khair andaish
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 10, 2007 13:49:06 GMT 5
Rafi sahib aap ka yeh avatar man bhaag bhaag ke tang nahin aata?
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 8, 2007 15:01:08 GMT 5
kia mazay ka jhagra numa qata hai khalid sahib
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 10, 2007 13:50:26 GMT 5
aqalmandoN ko naaqid ka ishaarey per ishaara hai magar apna to aisey hi ''guzaare'' per guzaara hai Wahhhhhhhh
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 8, 2007 15:02:57 GMT 5
wah ji wah atif sahib kia khoob farmaya ap ne.
""""Hum aik lamhay ki dhoop ko bhi taras gaeay haiN Humaray sar par sahab kaisa huwa musallat?
MuhabbatoN ko najanay kis ki nazar lagi hai? Yeh nafratoN ka nisab kaisa huwa musallat?
Woh samnay tha magar na daikha jamal uss ka Nazar peh ATIF hijab kaisa huwa musallat?"""" wesay to poori ghazal hi achi hai magar akhri teen ashaar bohot hi mazay kay hain. keep it up
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 27, 2007 15:47:06 GMT 5
Rafi Sahib! Gustakhi muaaf kia aap nasri shaeri ko shaeri tasleem kartay haiN. Ghissa pitta jawab 'KHAYAL ki ehmiat" wal yahaN matt likhiyay ga.
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 27, 2007 15:39:54 GMT 5
Mr Brijinder Have some courtesy and write in Urdu. This is very pain giving act of yours. Really Khalid Sahib theek haiN aur tumharay mukhalif haiN. Yeh baat tumhaiN samajh nahiN aaye gi kiyukeh tum Maghrid Zada ho. Tum nay iss lafz "TUM" ko lay kar Alif Laila Hazar Dastan likh marni hai aur apnay aap ko tameez daar sabit karnay ki na-kaam koshish karni hai. Log theek kehtay haiN keh PathanoN aur SikhoN ki suwi hamesha atki rehti hai. Khalid sahib aik shareef aadmi haiN iss lieay tumhaiN aap janaB keh rahay haiN. Mujh maiN yeh salahiyat hai keh maiN tumhaiN Insha Allah seedha raasta dikhaooN ga. Agar jawab urdu maiN likhna hai tau shuq say warna apni angraizee bhagaarnay ki koi zarooorat nahiN. You should be apologised to every one especially Khalid Sahib. You are a short tempered maN. You are a selfish person who only knows to follow own deeds. Please speak no more on this topic. Remain in your status from now onwards.
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 19, 2007 15:30:40 GMT 5
Dosto! Salam! Sub say pehlay to sakht maazrat keh meray alfaaz say kafi doston ka dil dukha. Mera chandan yeh matlab nahin tha bahar hal main phir bhi sharminda hoon. Aik baar phir maazrat. Insha Allah aienda aisa nahin ho ga. Main to khud aik aajiz sa banda hoon najanay kaisay yeh gustakhi kar baitha. Magar brijindar jee aap bhi to aik baat per arr gaay thay. Atif sahib ne to likha bhi tha keh:-
"Aap ka kaha sar aankhon per! Agar aap itnay hi musir haiN free verse likhnay per tau zaroor likhaiN agar kisi zamanay maiN isay pazeeraiee mili tau aap ka naam bhi aay ga pioneers maiN. Agar meray jaisay logoN nay issay panapnay na diya tau aap apnay lieay Nasr ka medan select kar rakhaiN. Shukriya aur best wishes."
Razi Sahib wrote "jahan atk is baat ka taaluk hy k kon kon sy mareoof shairon ny nasri nazm kahi to janab is ko bhi sanad nahin kaha jaa sakta ..jin eham shairon nay nasri nazm kahi hy ka adab mnain jo bhi maqaam hay wo un ki paband shairy k hawalay say hay na k nasri nazm k hawalay say "
Aap ka rawayya bhi patther peh lakeer ki tarah raha.Mind na karian tau aik baat manain "Jaisa des wesa bhais". Aap bhi apna dil bara karain. Shukria
Fatimah Jee aap nasr lkha karain koi aap say nasr nagar ka muqaam nahin chheenta.
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 17, 2007 15:55:11 GMT 5
Shukar aay Sardar jee tussi mann gai o! naee te tussi donon kafi aggay tur gaay so! Khair Tussi aye te mannya keh free verse di dal hallay naee galni. Rabb Rakha! Meray wollon iss behs da ikhtitam ho raya aay. Ess taun baad koi reply naee hona chahida hai. (Jumla del kar diya gaya hai - done by Shaheen)
Khush rahain
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Post by Shaheen on Oct 11, 2007 13:26:23 GMT 5
brijinder g ab aap ittefaq karain ya na karain, magar agar aap ko sha'eri karni hai tau aap ko iss kae qawaed-o-zwabit ka lihaz karna paray ga. (Aap chooN karaiN ya chaaN). Main principly rafi tabasum aur atif sahiban kay saath hoon kiyunkeh wohi durust paat kar rahay haiN. Free verse ka urdu main mutbadil nasri nazm hai magar yeh sinf abhi tak koi jaga nahin bana saki. Perveen Shakir aik mutnazia shaera hain lihaza unn ka likha sanad nahin. kissi ustad ki likhi huwi nasri nazm paish karaiN. Ali sardar jafri bhi koi itnay baray shaer nahin keh unn ki maan li jaeay. Main nay atif sahib ki nazm Khawb, Saraab, Haqeeqat parhi hai uss nazm maiN bher kay andar rehtay muway sub kuchh keh dia gaya hai, Khudara ab tau maan jaeay aur zid chhor kar ya tau paaband shaeri shuru karain ya phir nasr main apna muqaam paida karaiN. Aap ka dost Shaheen
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