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Post by brijinder on Jun 29, 2007 1:57:56 GMT 5
Bekhudi
Ik mauj-e-samndar-e-qaynaat hai zindagi Khud hi jwaab aur swaalaat hai zindagi
Khud ki talaash yeh safar-e-hyaat Abhi din ki aarzu ab justju-e- raat
Kuch jaani pehchani raahon pay UmroN kay qaafilay Ghardish-e-doraaN main pinha manzilaiN Kabhi manzil ka pa laina Phir us say uqta jaanaa Yeh shauq-e-manzil nahi Shayud jeenay ka bus bahaanaa
Jab bar gayi bahut tanhai Banaya phulsupha-e-khudai But banayay banai azaanaiN Phir sajaai rishton ki dukaanaiN
Jab jab bhi khud say uqtaiya insaaN Daur-e-wehshat main laut aayaa insaaN
Is hajoom-e-zindagi main tanha hai har koi Bus giraphat-e-khwaab-e-bahaanaa hai har koi
Ik bhatkan umr kay jaNgloN main Liyay beqasi-e-namaloom diloN main Har koi jiyay jaataa hai Dard-o-masarrat kay ajab saNgam ko Unwaan-e-zindgai diyay jaataa hai
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Bekhudi
Jun 29, 2007 23:03:27 GMT 5
Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jun 29, 2007 23:03:27 GMT 5
Khoobsoorat khayal ko nazm kia aap nay Brijinder ji daad qabool farmaiay
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jul 2, 2007 23:12:22 GMT 5
brijinder ji khoobsoorat nazm ,, khoobsoorat andaz baat karnay ka thanx razi
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 3, 2007 21:42:37 GMT 5
bahut arsa say mein ap ki nazmein baqaidgi kay sath partha raha hon magar koe comment nahi deay,is ki waja ye ke souti jamaliat tashna reh jati thi, ap ki in nasri nazmooN ki (agar che mein is term ka qail nahi) interptaion karnay ki zaroorat hay qatae nazar is k ke fani hawala koe nahi banta magar ap kay han shairi hay aur wo lehja aur khanak jo noon meem rashid kay han hay wohi labo lehja ap ki nazmoon mein maujood hay aur bahut khoobsoorat hay bhalay karb ki koe soorat ho zindagi talashnay ka amal ho ya koe imagery bahut khoobsorti aur rachao kay sath ati hay kash ke ap aroozi halway ko bhi dhain mein rakhein aur koe nazm kahin tu dili khushi ho gi
aqeel
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Post by brijinder on Jul 5, 2007 1:46:24 GMT 5
Razi saheb, I am very thankful for the kind words of appreciation. Aqeel saheb, I was moved by your such frank words of appreciation.Am not sure if I really deserve these. I couldnot understand what you asked in addition to your appreciation.It was not clear to me.Plz elaboarte so that i can keep in mind next time. Regards Brijinder"Sagar"
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