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Post by Sukhanwar on Apr 13, 2009 0:52:19 GMT 5
hafiz sahb aap ny nasir kazmi ki zameen main ghazal kehnay ki koshish ki hy laykin is main aap auzaan ko qaboo nahin rakh sakay umeed hy aap is per twaja dain gy thanx razi
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Apr 13, 2009 13:26:49 GMT 5
Post by zaki on Apr 13, 2009 13:26:49 GMT 5
Bahut khoob .... Sada khush raheay ...
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Post by nasirburney786 on Apr 20, 2009 0:25:14 GMT 5
mohtaram qadri sb.asslmualaikum aap ki ghazal nazar nawaz hoi baat aozaan ki chal rahi hai to socha k main bhi guftugu mein shareek ho jaon kuch na kuch seekhne ko mil hi jayega aap ne jis tarha taqtey ki hai aour ghazal ko mouzoon qaraar dene ki koshish ki hai aap ke nazdeek yaqeenan mouzoon hai lekin kuch usooli baaten arz karna chahta hoon aap hi ki taqteey ko dhyaan mein rakhte huwe 1-aap ka ye sher{ ikhlaas ne kuch na parwah ki} pehli baat "na" ko aap ne do harfi bandha hai jo k aik harfi hai is liye aap ka ye misra namouzoon hai doosri baat" parwah " asl mein bagher "he" ke hai yani "parwa" 2-maqte ke pehle misre mein "nuqta chee'n" ye lafz asl mein "nukta chee'n " hai yaani bagher nuqte ka kaaf aour toye ki jagha te hai tarazoo waali mukhlis nasir burney
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Post by Aqeel Malik on May 2, 2009 12:43:58 GMT 5
Qadri sahab adab !
behs ko jancha,sab say pehlay tu razi sahab nay wazwh nahi kia ke aroozi hawalay say un kay zehn mein kia hay lihaza us par mein raey qaim nahi karsakta tamam ghazal wazn mein hay siwaey un jaghooN kay jin ki taraf nasir sahab nay ishara kia magar un ki aik baat say ikhtilaaf hay keh NUkTA CHEEN hona chaheay ya Nuqta chee'N tu arz ye hay ke sher ka akhir hamesha zarab kehlaata hay aur zarab mein agar do sakin ikhta ho bhi jaei tu jaiz hoty hein qadri sahab ki bas ye ghalati hay ke unhooN nay nukta cheen ba ilaan noon nahi bandha agar bandh bhi dein tu wazn say kharij nahi hoga
is behr kay bahad zahafaat hein aur un ko barta jata hay nasir kazmi ki pehli barish mein jaga jaga ap ko misaaal milay gi
is wazn ko
felun felun felun felun mafa ilatun mafa ilatun
mutafa ilatun mutafa ilatun
fa ee faoolun felun felun
aur najanay kitnay he zahafat kay sath bandha jasakta hay
thnx aqeel
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