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Post by Atif Mirza on Feb 18, 2008 13:33:50 GMT 5
Idraak
Gumaan ki sarhadoN say aagay HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN maiN hum nay Jo aaNkh kholi Tau khwaab duniyaa biChhaR chuki thi
RiwaayatoN se HikaayatoN tak Safar maiN saari khayaal raahoN say raabtay khatm ho chukay thay Wohi tasawwur ki sar-zameeN, jis pe aik arsay say bus rahay thay HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN say uss per Nazar jo daalii tau ajnabi thi
Yeh khwaab duniyaa, khayaal raahaiN Huwi haiN weeraaN Wohi tasawwur ki sar-zameeN ab ujaR chuki hai Wo khwaab duniyaa biChhaR chuki hai
HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN maiN hum jab say aa basay haiN Har aik shay kaa pataa lagaa hai HamaiN yeh idraak ho rahaa hai
Her aik rishtaa, her aik naaTaa MuhabbatoN maiN hai kitnaa mukhliS? AafaaoN maiN pur-khulooS kitnaa?
HaqeeqatoN kay jahaaN nay hum ko bataa diyaa hai MuhabbatoN ko parakhnaa hum ko sikhaa diyaa hai
Naay safar par chalaa diyaa hai
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Feb 18, 2008 23:25:29 GMT 5
wahhhh
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Post by khalid on Feb 19, 2008 6:10:52 GMT 5
bahut achhi nazm kahi hai Atif ji.amooman logon ko gahzal kehna mushkil lagta hai aur vo aazaad nazm kehte hain, lekin maine aaj tak shaayad 1 ya 2 nazm hi kahi hongi, ghazal kehte hue chaahe behr mein koii galti ho jaaye lekin main ghazal kehna hi pasand karti huN. daad haazir hai qubool karen. behen aazaad nazm aasaan her giz nahiN hoti haN maadar ptder aazaad nazm aasan hoti hai ;D oata nahiN aap ne meiree nazm peRhi ya nahiN! aatif sb ko to dono asnaaf per hi uboor haasil hai!
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Post by khalid on Feb 19, 2008 6:13:12 GMT 5
mohtaram aatif sb bherpoor daad haazir hai! aap ghazal aur nazm, donoN hi kamaal kehte haiN! daad haazir hai!
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Post by HASIB RANA on Feb 19, 2008 13:27:24 GMT 5
Idraak
Gumaan ki sarhadoN say aagay HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN maiN hum nay Jo aaNkh kholi Tau khwaab duniyaa biChhaR chuki thi
RiwaayatoN se HikaayatoN tak Safar maiN saari khayaal raahoN say raabtay khatm ho chukay thay Wohi tasawwur ki sar-zameeN, jis pe aik arsay say bus rahay thay HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN say uss per Nazar jo daalii tau ajnabi thi
Yeh khwaab duniyaa, khayaal raahaiN Huwi haiN weeraaN Wohi tasawwur ki sar-zameeN ab ujaR chuki hai Wo khwaab duniyaa biChhaR chuki hai
HaqeeqatoN ke jahaaN maiN hum jab say aa basay haiN Har aik shay kaa pataa lagaa hai HamaiN yeh idraak ho rahaa hai
Her aik rishtaa, her aik naaTaa MuhabbatoN maiN hai kitnaa mukhliS? AafaaoN maiN pur-khulooS kitnaa?
HaqeeqatoN kay jahaaN nay hum ko bataa diyaa hai MuhabbatoN ko parakhnaa hum ko sikhaa diyaa hai
Naay safar par chalaa diyaa hai
BOHAT KHOOB DEAR BOHAT KHOOB ....... NICE 1 WISH U ALL THE BEST
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Post by saeed on Feb 29, 2008 3:50:20 GMT 5
Mirza saab- achhi nazm hai......mubarak ho! saeed
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Post by zehrab on Mar 7, 2008 11:33:14 GMT 5
Atif Saheb
Ek bherpoor nazm ke liye dil ki gehraaiyon sey dheron daad.
Likhtey rahiye isi tarah......mashaAllah
Kher andesh
Qamar
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 8:00:44 GMT 5
bahut achhi nazm kahi hai Atif ji.amooman logon ko gahzal kehna mushkil lagta hai aur vo aazaad nazm kehte hain, lekin maine aaj tak shaayad 1 ya 2 nazm hi kahi hongi, ghazal kehte hue chaahe behr mein koii galti ho jaaye lekin main ghazal kehna hi pasand karti huN. daad haazir hai qubool karen. Sunita ji nazm mushkil hai ya ghazal yeh tau mujhay nahiN maaloom bus likh lete hooN, kabhi ye nahiN soch keh koi aik mushkil hai ya na mumkin hai. Bus dil say niklti huwi awaz hoti hai jo maaloom nahiN kaisay kiss qaalib maiN dhal jaati hai: -
Asar kaisay na ho unn maiN jo mujh per lafz utartay haiN UnhaiN chaahat ki chhalni say mera munn chhaan leta hai
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 8:02:13 GMT 5
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 15:16:00 GMT 5
mohtaram aatif sb bherpoor daad haazir hai! aap ghazal aur nazm, donoN hi kamaal kehte haiN! daad haazir hai! Khalid Saheb aap nay bahut baRay compliments diyay haiN. Aap ka bahut bahut shukriya.
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 15:20:02 GMT 5
BOHAT KHOOB DEAR BOHAT KHOOB ....... NICE 1 WISH U ALL THE BEST
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 15:23:08 GMT 5
Mirza saab- achhi nazm hai......mubarak ho! saeed Khair Mubarak Saeed ji! Shukriya
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 16, 2008 15:24:26 GMT 5
Atif Saheb Ek bherpoor nazm ke liye dil ki gehraaiyon sey dheron daad. Likhtey rahiye isi tarah......mashaAllah Kher andesh Qamar Qamar Bhai! Daad ka bahut shukriya. Aap ki pazeeraaee ka andaz bahut bhaya.
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Post by ramishjaan on May 16, 2008 21:33:50 GMT 5
AOA Atif sahib bohat khobsorat nazm meri kamzor yadasht ke mutabiq sahyd pehli bar ap ki nazm parh raha ho,n ( agar mera kehyal ghhalat ho to maazrat qabol ki jyie ) meri janib se bohat sari dad ap ki is pur asar nazm ke liye waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 20, 2008 0:23:50 GMT 5
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