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Post by Tanweer on Jul 18, 2007 22:08:57 GMT 5
aik adna se kawish....
ashway unkay husn k 'kehta mein raha rukh-e-yaar ko mahtaab 'kehta mein raha
yadoun ka sarmayaE nayaab aziz mujhay shorish-e-tangi waqat mein 'behta mein raha
day kar zakham shadaan hotay hain bohat sitam hans kar unkay 'sehta mein raha
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha
oskay baam tak dastras na thi phir bhi apnay tarashay khiyaloun say 'behlta mein raha
izhaar apni chahat ka mein kar paoun es tasawar mein he' ghulta mein raha
aabgina ehsas ka totay na kabhi Tanweer zaat mein apni aksar 'bikharta mein raha
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jul 19, 2007 9:34:02 GMT 5
wah Tanweer sahib
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Post by HASIB RANA on Jul 19, 2007 21:00:47 GMT 5
aik adna se kawish....ashway unkay husn k 'kehta mein raha rukh-e-yaar ko mahtaab 'kehta mein raha
yadoun ka sarmayaE nayaab aziz mujhay shorish-e-tangi waqat mein 'behta mein raha
day kar zakham shadaan hotay hain bohat sitam hans kar unkay 'sehta mein raha
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha
oskay baam tak dastras na thi phir bhi apnay tarashay khiyaloun say 'behlta mein raha
izhaar apni chahat ka mein kar paoun es tasawar mein he' ghulta mein raha
aabgina ehsas ka totay na kabhi Tanweer zaat mein apni aksar 'bikharta mein raha BOHAT KHOOB TANWEER JE
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha NICE ONE WISH U ALL THE BEST MAY ALLAH BLESS U
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 21, 2007 11:49:45 GMT 5
Dr. Rafi Sahib! Bohat inaayat aapki, Shukriyah Tanweer
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 21, 2007 11:53:36 GMT 5
aik adna se kawish....ashway unkay husn k 'kehta mein raha rukh-e-yaar ko mahtaab 'kehta mein raha
yadoun ka sarmayaE nayaab aziz mujhay shorish-e-tangi waqat mein 'behta mein raha
day kar zakham shadaan hotay hain bohat sitam hans kar unkay 'sehta mein raha
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha
oskay baam tak dastras na thi phir bhi apnay tarashay khiyaloun say 'behlta mein raha
izhaar apni chahat ka mein kar paoun es tasawar mein he' ghulta mein raha
aabgina ehsas ka totay na kabhi Tanweer zaat mein apni aksar 'bikharta mein raha BOHAT KHOOB TANWEER JE
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha NICE ONE WISH U ALL THE BEST MAY ALLAH BLESS U
[/SIZE][/quote] Rana Sahib! Bohat Shukriyah aapka, mamnoon hon aapka. Tanweer
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Post by khalid on Jul 25, 2007 6:52:30 GMT 5
mohtaram tanveer sb aadaab!
aapki ghazal peRhi! mazameen k lihaaz se khoob hai! lekin behr ke shadeed masaael se do chaar hai! isey ager aap naey sho,araa ke forum meiN post fermaaeN to munaasib ho ga!
mazameen k liye bahar haal daad haazir hai!
khaaksaar!
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 25, 2007 13:30:09 GMT 5
Khalid Mahmood Sahib!
Janab aapki tajweez sar aaunk^hon par. Khushi mili k aap nay masbat tanqeed ki. Main Razi sahib say darkhawast karta hon k issay "Fikr-e-nau" mein muntaqil kar dein.
Mazameen ki pasand^deedgi ka shukriya.
Tanweer
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jul 26, 2007 18:57:35 GMT 5
Tanweer sahab ghazal bahut kamzoor hay,behr say kharih ashaar ki tadad bahut ziada hay is taraf dhian daynay ki zaroorat hay
A M
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jul 26, 2007 23:22:55 GMT 5
tanweer bhai jin doston ny ghazal k masaail ki taraf tawaja dilaai wo drust magar mujhay khushi hy k aap ny aik koshish to ki aur sab sy barri baat yeh k aap ny sab ki raay ko tasleem bhi kia yehi aap ka barra pan hy main aap ki ghazal fikr e nau main muntaqil kar raha hoon aur umeed rakhta hoon aap koshish jaari rakhain gy thanx razi
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 28, 2007 11:57:30 GMT 5
Tanweer sahab ghazal bahut kamzoor hay,behr say kharih ashaar ki tadad bahut ziada hay is taraf dhian daynay ki zaroorat hay A M Aqeel Malik Sahib! Masbat tanqeed aur ghalatiyon ki nishaan^dehi k liey mashkoor hon, agar mumkin ho to mujhay ibtadaee qaeeda email kar dein, mein yaqeenan poori tandehi say mutaliya karon ga, aur mashq jari rakhon ga... will u please ? Khush rahiey Tanweer
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Post by HASIB RANA on Aug 3, 2007 20:49:51 GMT 5
BOHAT KHOOB TANWEER JE
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha NICE ONE WISH U ALL THE BEST MAY ALLAH BLESS U
[/SIZE][/quote] Rana Sahib! Bohat Shukriyah aapka, mamnoon hon aapka. Tanweer[/quote] U WEL COME DEAR MAY ALLAH BLESS U
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Post by Tanweer on Aug 4, 2007 13:35:54 GMT 5
Haseeb Rana Sahib!
Shukriya aapka janab.
Tanweer
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Post by HASIB RANA on Aug 6, 2007 21:13:20 GMT 5
aik adna se kawish....ashway unkay husn k 'kehta mein raha rukh-e-yaar ko mahtaab 'kehta mein raha
yadoun ka sarmayaE nayaab aziz mujhay shorish-e-tangi waqat mein 'behta mein raha
day kar zakham shadaan hotay hain bohat sitam hans kar unkay 'sehta mein raha
aadat na thi shehr say nikalnay ki hisaar mein muqayad apnay 'rehta mein raha
oskay baam tak dastras na thi phir bhi apnay tarashay khiyaloun say 'behlta mein raha
izhaar apni chahat ka mein kar paoun es tasawar mein he' ghulta mein raha
aabgina ehsas ka totay na kabhi Tanweer zaat mein apni aksar 'bikharta mein raha TAWEER JE ....... AAP SAY PASHGE MOAFI CHAHOON GAA KEH AaP SAY IJAZAT LEY BINA AaP KI GHAZAL KO TOR PHOR DEYA HAY MAIN NEY ........ MATLA LIKH DEYA HAY .......... Aor SATH HE IS KI TAQTE B KER DE HAY Aor BEHR B LIKH DE HAY TAKEH AAP KO AASANI SAY SUMJH AA SAKEY .............. ........... AGAR AaP MUNASAB SUMJHAIN TU IS PER GHAZAL LIKH LAIN
ISI IK FASOON MEIN HE REHTA RAHA RUKH-E-YAAR KO CHAND KEHTA RAHA ....
FA'OU "Nothing" .. FA'OU "Nothing" .. FA'OU "Nothing" .. FA'OU ISI IK .. FASO MEIN .. HEREH TA .. RAHA ................................................................................ FA'O "Nothing" .. FA'O "Nothing" .. FA'O "Nothing" .. FA'OU RUKH-E- YAA .. RKO CHA .. DKEH TA .. RAHA
APNEY DOST AHBAB SAY GUZARSH KERON GAA ........... AaP NEY TANQEED KI BOHAT ACH'HE BAT HAY KERNI B CHAHEY . TAKEH NAEY LIKHNEY WALON KO PTA CHALTA RAHEY KEH WO KIA LIKH RAHEY HAYIN ........... Aor KESA LIKH RAHEY HAYIN ....... LAKIN KIA HE KHOOB HO GA KEH AGAR TANQEED K SATH SATH IN K LIKHEY HUEY KI ISLAH B KER DE JAEY TU ............MERE BAAT AGAR KISI KO BURE LAGE HO TU MOAFE CHAHON GAA ....
AQEEL SAHIB . AaP NEY FERMAYA KEH ASHAAR KI TADAD BOHAT ZEYADAH HAY ............ MEREY KHYAL MAIN TU SAT ASHAAR KUCH ZEYADAH NAHEEN HAYIN ........ BADEY BADEY Aor ACHEY ACHEY SHORAA NEY KAFI SARE GHAZLAIN SAT ASHAAR KI TADAD MAIN HE LIKHE HAYIN ................ ....
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Post by hooriya on Aug 7, 2007 14:03:09 GMT 5
tanweer bhai kisi aur forum par bhi aapki ye gahzal ko padha tha jab bhi achhi lagi aur aaj bhi..
daad hazir hai.
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Post by kanwal on Sept 11, 2007 23:45:50 GMT 5
bohat khoob uncle ,... takheer se reply ki maazrat ,... umeed hai ke aap apni is nikammi beti ko mua´f farmaa deiN ge ,.......... daad e guL aapki nazR ,...
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