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Post by janclinic on May 5, 2008 0:10:48 GMT 5
hi ,,,, i am dr.najma,, it is pleasure for me to join sukhanwar network ,, i m sending my attempt in poetry.. Hanssi lay gia , woh malaal day gia,,, Rooh ko mere ajabb zawaal day gia,,, Wafa ko baiwafaie , ishq ko russwaie.. Woh mohabbatun ko aisi misaal day gia Dil e maayus ko ek aor khalish mel gaie., Akkas ko meray ujarr khad o khaal day gia Zameen bhi hairaan,,aasmaan bhi prayshaan Wafa kay maaenn e ko niaa sawaal day gia Rewaaitun ke bhaintt chharra gia hamain Dard e hijjar ko arooj kasab e kamaal day gia Shabb o roze say meray taqdeer khailti rahi Pahyia yeh waqt ka ek naie chaal day gia., Phir kiss kay khayal say abaad hoongay hum Zeest ko mere waj e paiymaal day gia ,,,
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on May 6, 2008 23:56:07 GMT 5
wah
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 7, 2008 10:33:25 GMT 5
Achhi kaavish hai! Koshish jaari rakhaiN, wazan maiN aa jaay gi shaeri. Keep it up
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jul 8, 2008 0:21:55 GMT 5
dr sahiba aap ki ghazal k khyaalat achay hain magar is main behr k masaaail mojood hain yaqeenan waqt guzarnay k saath saath yeh bhi khatm ho jain jo shora ( aur in main aap bhi shamil hain ) achi fikr rakhtay hain aur un k haan mazameen mazboot hotay hain unhain wazn k masaail par zaroor tawaja dayni chaahiay thanx razi
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Post by kanwal on Jul 25, 2008 1:10:01 GMT 5
hi ,,,, i am dr.najma,, it is pleasure for me to join sukhanwar network ,, i m sending my attempt in poetry.. Hanssi lay gia , woh malaal day gia,,, Rooh ko mere ajabb zawaal day gia,,, Wafa ko baiwafaie , ishq ko russwaie.. Woh mohabbatun ko aisi misaal day gia Dil e maayus ko ek aor khalish mel gaie., Akkas ko meray ujarr khad o khaal day gia Zameen bhi hairaan,,aasmaan bhi prayshaan Wafa kay maaenn e ko niaa sawaal day gia Rewaaitun ke bhaintt chharra gia hamain Dard e hijjar ko arooj kasab e kamaal day gia Shabb o roze say meray taqdeer khailti rahi Pahyia yeh waqt ka ek naie chaal day gia., Phir kiss kay khayal say abaad hoongay hum Zeest ko mere waj e paiymaal day gia ,,, Maine jab naya naya likhna shuru kiya tha to mujhe wellwisher ne bataaya tha shairi ki bunyaad kuch satoonoN par hoti hai ,...
1,... Khayaal 2,... AlfaaZ 3,... adaigi 4,... zameen (Radeef o Qaifya) aur 5,... Behr
aur kaNwal tumhare paas chaar satoon haiN sirf aakhri 5vaaN satoon nahiN hai, jisse tumheiN mazbooti deni hai, kyuNke yehi sab se ehaM satoon hai ke ghazl chaar satoonoN ke baghair to Qabil e qabool ho sakti hai par 5chvaN hona laazim hai ,...
Aur iss 5achveiN satoon ko banaane meiN maine apni saari koshisheiN lagaa diN,... Abhi bhi seekh rahi hooN, kyuNke yeh 5chvaN satoon samandar ki wussat rakhta hai, jisse samjhna mushkil bhi hai aur asaan bhi ,....
So Dr. najmaa jee wohi baat maiN Aapko bhi kahooNgi ke Aap ko paas be shaQ Khuda ne 4 satoon diye haiN, lekin 5chvaN satoon Aapko khud taameer karna hoga ,...
Aur mujhe umeed hai ke Aapki yeh lagan bohat jald yeh satoon taameer kar de gi ,...
Iss khubsoorat kaVish par daad ke guL kaNwal ki tarf se ,...
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Post by dr.najma shaheen on Nov 10, 2008 10:20:05 GMT 5
kanwal jee apki baat 100 percent theek hay ,,,dua karain main bhi ap ki trah koshish main kamyaab rahun....
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Post by zaki on May 2, 2009 17:17:29 GMT 5
Bahut khoob Dr. Sahiba .....
Nihaal iss gulista'n mein jitne barhay hain hamesha woh neechay se ooper charhay hain ...
Sada khush raheay ...
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