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Post by brijinder on Jul 25, 2007 2:43:21 GMT 5
TalkhiaN-3
Kya tujhko sunaauN haal-e-dil apna Kya tujhko dikhaauN apni kashmakash ka jahaaN Tu abhi is des say nawaaqif hai meray dost Toonay daikha hi nahi abhi koi maNzar tanhaa
Toonay piya hi nahi jo gham-e-ishq-o-jahaaN ka sum Tu samjhayga phir mera tarpana kya? Toonay to guzaari hai apni umr mefiloN kay saayoN maiN Ho kay bayparwaa ya reh kay khaufzadaa Aur daikhee jo har charay maiN aisi hi baigairat ki jhalak Toonay isay parakhany ki kabhi koshish hi na ki
Aaj tu aayaa hai meri duniya maiN Aur khara hai uljha-uljha KhwaaboN kay abr say darta darta Ahsaas kay sooraj say sehma-sehma Tak raha hai meri wusat-e-tanhai ko beyaqeeni say Daikh raha hooN maiN teri aaNkhoN maiN hairat kay nishaaN
Kya tujhko sunaauN haal-e-dil apna Kya tujhko dikhaauN apni kasmkash ka jahaaN?
----------------------------------------- Sum- poison,
Plz point out if there is any typo mistake
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 25, 2007 13:17:11 GMT 5
Brijinder Ji!
Hope you would be fine, I nice piece of work by you. As asked in your last line for indicating any typo mistake.
I think in the 2nd line the word which u wrote "kashmlash"
"Kya tujhko sunaauN haal-e-dil apna Kya tujhko dikhaauN apni kashmlash ka jahaaN"
it is KASH^MA^KASH meaning "Un certain"
Next: Toonay piya hi nahi jo ghum-e-ishq-o-jahaaN ka sum
Better to type :"Gham"
Toonay piya hi nahi jo ghum-e-ishq-o-jahaaN ka sum
I could not understand this word ?
Toonay isay parakhany ki kabhi koshis hi na ki
Write it as "Koshish
Kya tujhko dikhaauN apni "kasmkash ka jahaaN?
Write it as "Kashmakash
Ignoring some typo mistakes a good work by you
Congrats....
Tanweer
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jul 25, 2007 22:47:37 GMT 5
Bohat khoob khayalaat haiN Brijinder ji tanweer sahib kay khayalaat say main bhi mutefiq hooN
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Post by brijinder on Jul 30, 2007 1:51:57 GMT 5
Tanweer saheb, I am sorry for being late in replying.I have since made the correction n i am very thankful for pointing these out to me.Sum is poison n I dont know how to convey the uu sound in roman. Tabbassum saheb thanx a lot for the words of appreciation as usual. Regards brijinder
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Post by Tanweer on Jul 31, 2007 17:41:35 GMT 5
Brijinder Ji !
Toonay piya hi nahi jo gham-e-ishq-o-jahaaN ka sum
You can write it as Soom
OR
You can use the word Zehar = "POISON"
Tanweer
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Post by brijinder on Aug 17, 2007 2:35:31 GMT 5
Thanx a lot Tanweer saheb,for the suggestion. Regards
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Post by kanwal on Sept 11, 2007 23:30:45 GMT 5
khoob ,...
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