Post by tashiezaheer on Jul 7, 2008 6:22:20 GMT 5
Jun 30, 2007 5:24:01 GMT 5 @rooh said:
Mohsin Naqvii ki ghazal, "tujhe ruswaaii ka dar hai na aaya kar" parhii..bahot hii pasand aayii ..so iss ghazal ki bahr per likhne ki koshish ki thii..Pata nahii bahr theek samjh aayii ki nahii...yahan maujood doston se guzarish hai plz bataein kya meine bahr theek parkrii hai?
Ghazal achhi hai ya nahii ye to baad ki baat hai...
to lijiye ghazal peshe khidmat hai..
kisii din aaye dar pe tere bhii ruswaaii
sataye tujhko bhii to kabhiiii tanhaaiiii
muhabbat bhii jis ne saude ki tarah kii hai
kahaaN samjhega wo hijr kii raanaaiiii
diyaa merii hii qismat ne hai dhokaa mujhe
bahaarein maangii thi aur khizaaaaN paaiiiii
khushii daikhii hii jis ne na ho, uss dil pe
tabaahii aayii bhii hai to, bhalii aaayiiiii
mein eik din apna ghar chhoR ke nikali thii
wo din tha ke jab se mein huii sehraaii
Regards
Rooh
Rooh Saheba,
Aap ki koshish achi hey. Is silsiley meN chand aik bateeN aap key gosh guzaar karna chahta hooN. Maqsad aap ki "Dil aazari" hargiz naheeN hey. Aap ko meri koi bhi baat buri kagey to meN us ke liey peshgi aap se ma'azarat khwah hooN.
Sher ko samjhney aur sher kehney ke liey chand aik buniyadi batoN ka ilm zaroori hota hey. Ghazal shairee ki aik sinf hey jis meN har she aik mukammal NAZM hota hey. Qafia, radeef, behr, wazn sher ke zaroori ajza heN. Radeef (wo lafz ya alfaaz jo har sher ke doosrey misrey ke aakhir meN bar bar kehey jatey heN) ka hona zaroori naheeN hey laikin baaqi ki teen cheezeN nihayat zaroori hoti heN.
Is ke ilawa, ghazal ke har misrey ke arkaan taqreeban barabar hotey heN. Yani un ka size barabar hota hey. Do misrooN meN tin arkan tak ka farq jaez smjha jata ahey, us se ziyada ka farq durust naheeN samjha jata.
Mera mashwara aap ke liey ye hey ke aap kisi achey ustaad ke samney zanooey adab tey kijey.
Zindagi ke aur bohat se kamoN ki tarah, Shairee karney ke liey bhi taleem, mehnat, aur riazat darkaar hoti hey. Jis tarah, aik mazboot imarat bananey ke liey, aik paedaar bunyaad ki zaroorat hoti hey, bulkil isi tarah, she samjhney ya kehney ke liey, shairee ke barey meN bunyadi maloomaat ka hona nihayaty zaroori hey.
Maulana Altaf Hussain Hali saheb ki kitab, "Muqamma e sher o shairee" is mauzoo par aaj bhi behtareen kitab samjhi jati hey.
Aap hi ashaar aur aap hi khialat ley kar meN ne tin chaar sher likhney ki koshish ki hey. Aap ki khdmat meN pesh karta hooN.
Is wazahat ke saath ke in ash'aar ki bahr ka Mohsin Naqvi saheb ke misrey ki behr sey koi t'alluq naheeN he.
Darj zai ash'aar meN. "GHAM" radeef hey aur, "JUDA", "SADA", "KAHA", "BHALA" waghaira "QAFIEY" heN.
Rahey meri tarah se too bhi tanha
Tirey hissey meN bhi aaeN sada gham
Kabhi wo wasl ki khushiyaN thi apni
Juda raaheN heN ab apni, juda gham
Mohabbat bhi thi jiski duniyadari
UThaooN kyoN meN uske hijr ka gham
Khushi jis dil ne dekhi hi naheeN thi
Tabaahi us pe aaey bhi to kiya gham
Miree qismat meN dhokey hi likhey they
karooN koyoN kar khazaN ka meN bhala gham
Jesey, Razi saheb ne kaha hey, likti rahey. Riazat shart hey, kamiabi zaroor hogi, insha Allah.
Du'a go
Tashie Zaheer