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taqtee
Apr 15, 2009 19:13:53 GMT 5
Post by nasirmalik on Apr 15, 2009 19:13:53 GMT 5
izzat maab hakeem bashir sahib! aap ki ghazal taqtee k sath parhne ko mili. aap is par nazar-e-sani kar lejea ga. Razi sahib kachi baat naheeN karte. un ki mojodagi meiN hamari majal naheeN, is lea unhaiN dawat fikar deta hooN. Nasir Malik
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taqtee
Apr 20, 2009 21:55:57 GMT 5
Post by Rafi Tabasum on Apr 20, 2009 21:55:57 GMT 5
Muhtaram Hafiz Basheer sahib aap ki ghazal khayalaat kay hwalay say achi koshish qaraar dee ja sakti hay urooz kay hwalay say waqaee nazar e saani ki zaroorat hay aap ki taqatee say bhi maiN muttefiq nahi brah e karam is par bhi tawaju farmaiN
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taqtee
Apr 21, 2009 11:48:24 GMT 5
Post by Zagham Abidi on Apr 21, 2009 11:48:24 GMT 5
hafiz sahab umeed hay khariat say hon gay aap. aap ki ghazal aur us ki taqtee perhi. main taqtee k asoolon say wakif nahin hoon. lakin kuch baatain kahtakti hain. phelay shair k doosray misray main TERI HUM ko aap nay felun k wazn per kaisay taqtee ki hay.aur second last shair k doosray misray main rusvaion ki taqtee kertay hoay aap nay shayad is ka talafuz change kia hay. maira khayal hay aisa theek nahi hay. please correct me if i m wrong
zagham abidi
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taqtee
May 2, 2009 12:49:56 GMT 5
Post by Aqeel Malik on May 2, 2009 12:49:56 GMT 5
Qadri sahab adab !
behs ko jancha,sab say pehlay tu razi sahab nay wazwh nahi kia ke aroozi hawalay say un kay zehn mein kia hay lihaza us par mein raey qaim nahi karsakta tamam ghazal wazn mein hay siwaey un jaghooN kay jin ki taraf nasir sahab nay ishara kia magar un ki aik baat say ikhtilaaf hay keh NUkTA CHEEN hona chaheay ya Nuqta chee'N tu arz ye hay ke sher ka akhir hamesha zarab kehlaata hay aur zarab mein agar do sakin ikhta ho bhi jaei tu jaiz hoty hein qadri sahab ki bas ye ghalati hay ke unhooN nay nukta cheen ba ilaan noon nahi bandha agar bandh bhi dein tu wazn say kharij nahi hoga
is behr kay bahad zahafaat hein aur un ko barta jata hay nasir kazmi ki pehli barish mein jaga jaga ap ko misaaal milay gi
is wazn ko
felun felun felun felun mafa ilatun mafa ilatun
mutafa ilatun mutafa ilatun
fa ee faoolun felun felun
aur najanay kitnay he zahafat kay sath bandha jasakta hay
thnx aqeel
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zaki
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taqtee
May 2, 2009 17:54:17 GMT 5
Post by zaki on May 2, 2009 17:54:17 GMT 5
Mein khud bhi urooz k baray mein elm nahi rakhta ... laikan ghazal parhte huway Mehsoos hota hai keh iss mein kuch khaami hai ... I,m agree with Dr. Zagham Abidi
Sada khush raheay ...
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taqtee
May 2, 2009 19:23:53 GMT 5
Post by nasirmalik on May 2, 2009 19:23:53 GMT 5
Janab Hafiz Sahib! Khuda aap ka zor-e-qalam mehmaiz kare (aameen) aap ne is ghazal meiN aik jaga "Parwah" ka lafz istemal kia he jo mery nazdeek darust naheeN he. ye lafz "Parwah" naheeN bal k "parwa" he. kion k ism sift "laparwaee" he jab ke laparwah se laparwahee ka kharooj sabit hota he. dosrey sher ka misra saani "Tairy zaat ki ulfat ki waadi" ki mozooN shakal ye hoo gi "tri zaat se ulfat ki waadi"
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