farri
ibtidaai rukn
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Post by farri on Nov 1, 2007 21:19:25 GMT 5
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farri
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Post by farri on Nov 1, 2007 21:23:18 GMT 5
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farri
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Post by farri on Nov 1, 2007 21:26:50 GMT 5
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farri
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Post by farri on Nov 1, 2007 21:29:39 GMT 5
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Post by Atif Mirza on Nov 1, 2007 23:08:46 GMT 5
Farzana Sahiba! Aap ka afsaana bohut achha hai magar mind matt kijiay ga iss maiN awwal tau angraizee iste'maal honi nahiN chaiay thi agar ho bhi gaiee hai tau gramitically theek to hoti. Doosri baat yeh keh Paragraph making ki taraf dhayan nahiN rakha gaya. Teesri baat yeh keh mukalimay ka andaz bhi ikhtiyar nahiN kia gaya, afsaanoN maiN baat cheet main bhi mukaliay ki tarz per wawain ka iste'maal karna chahiay. Aap say guzarish hai keh aap baRay afsana nigaroN kay afsaanay paRhaiN, unn par ghaur kariaN aur phir likhaiN. Umeed hai keh aap meri baat ka bura nahiN manaiN gi.
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Nov 2, 2007 7:43:48 GMT 5
Achi kahani Farzana
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Post by Sukhanwar on Nov 5, 2007 1:23:29 GMT 5
farzana sahiba aap ka afsana parha mujhay acha laga aap ny achi koshish ki magar jin baaton ki janib atif sahib ny tawaja dilaai aap un par bhi zaroor ghor kijiay afsanay main plot ki chusti aur jumlonki khoobsoorti donon ki bohat ehmiat hy english sirf wahan istamal kijiay jahan is ki zaroorat ho umeed hy aap in baton par tawaja dain gee bohat acha mustaqbil aap ka muntazir hy ..bas mehnat jaari rakhain thanx razi
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