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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 20, 2008 22:03:03 GMT 5
Sukhanwar dosto! Kafi arsay baad apnai aik purani ghazal paish kar raha hooN, umeed hai keh aap logoN ko pasan aay gi. Waisay mujhay tanqeed ki bhi tawaaqo hai!!!!!!!
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Post by khalid on Apr 21, 2008 1:06:19 GMT 5
aatif sb apney mehdood ilm, salaahiyat aur tjrabey ki bunyaad per kehta hooN k...........
jaisa us ne dikhaana chaaha uski ghazal meiN manzer deikha aaj ke daur ka sachha, saada aatif meiN ikk shaaer deikhaager kuch ghalat kaha ho to maazrat khaah hooN! meiree jaanib sey saada, aam fehm, moassir ghazal kehne k liye daad qubool keeje
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Post by sunita on Apr 21, 2008 2:21:30 GMT 5
Atif sahab yeh ghazal to aap ne Jan 2008 mein bhi yahin post kii thi.haan lekin tab mujhe urdu padni nahin aati thi aur aaj maine aap ki yeh ghazal bina kisi takleef ke padi hai kyunki ab maine urdu padna seekh liya hai, ek achhi ghazal par meri aur se daad haazir hai.
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Post by sunita on Apr 21, 2008 2:23:13 GMT 5
aatif sb apney mehdood ilm, salaahiyat aur tjrabey ki bunyaad per kehta hooN k...........
jaisa us ne dikhaana chaaha uski ghazal meiN manzer deikha aaj ke daur ka sachha, saada aatif meiN ikk shaaer deikhaager kuch ghalat kaha ho to maazrat khaah hooN! meiree jaanib sey saada, aam fehm, moassir ghazal kehne k liye daad qubool keeje waah Khaalid bhai qitta kehna koii aap se seekhe, bahut achha kaha hai aap ne.
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Post by khalid on Apr 21, 2008 7:29:49 GMT 5
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 22, 2008 17:41:25 GMT 5
aatif sb apney mehdood ilm, salaahiyat aur tjrabey ki bunyaad per kehta hooN k...........
jaisa us ne dikhaana chaaha uski ghazal meiN manzer deikha aaj ke daur ka sachha, saada aatif meiN ikk shaaer deikhaager kuch ghalat kaha ho to maazrat khaah hooN! meiree jaanib sey saada, aam fehm, moassir ghazal kehne k liye daad qubool keeje Khalid Sahib! Assalam-u-Alaikum! Meray liay baRi izzat afzaee ki baat hai keh aap meray TooTay phooTay lafzoN ko shaeri samajh kar daad detay hai aur uss per itni tawaajah day kar apnay khoob soorat qataat say nawaztay haiN. MaiN aap ka az hudd mamnoon hooN. Aap ki daad meray liay ezaz hai. Shukriya.
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 22, 2008 17:56:03 GMT 5
Atif sahab yeh ghazal to aap ne Jan 2008 mein bhi yahin post kii thi.haan lekin tab mujhe urdu padni nahin aati thi aur aaj maine aap ki yeh ghazal bina kisi takleef ke padi hai kyunki ab maine urdu padna seekh liya hai, ek achhi ghazal par meri aur se daad haazir hai. Sunita Behn! Salam-o-Aadaab! Aap durust farma rahi haiN, waqee yeh Ghazal maiN nay pehlay 29 Jan 2008 ko post ki thi. Uss waqt aap ki nazr say nahiN guzree. Shayad aap ki nazr-e-karam ki waja say mujh say yeh khushgawar ghalati huwi aur aap kai daa waSool ho gayee. Mujhay khaS tau r per iss cheez ki khushi huwi keh aap ko Urdu paRhna aa gaee. Daad ataa karnay ka shukriya.
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 22, 2008 17:59:24 GMT 5
Kahlid Sahib meri taraH aap ki bhi chori pakRi gayee hai aap meri is ghazal per pehlay bhi daad-o-tehseen kay dongray barsa chukay haiN. Hawalay kay liay mandarja zail quote paRh lijiay, Insha Allah meri tarah aap ko bhi afaqa ho ga.waah mirza sb jo kuch deikha sab dikha diya hameN! choti behr ki baRi ghazal kehney per daad qubool keeje!
is mertaba she' k bagheir hi kaam chala leeje! ;D........ second thought.........log kaheN aatif hai, lekiN ham ne chamakta akhter deikha
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Post by sunita on Apr 22, 2008 18:12:02 GMT 5
Jee Atif Bhai jaan uss waqt ghar mein bahut si problem chal rahi thiiN meri beti ki tabeeyat theek nahin rehti thi aur ek mera bila hai woh bhi ab tak treatment par hai bas issi liye bazm mein kam aa pati thi.Allah ke fazl se ab dono kuch behtar hain so yahan aana hota rehta hai. khush rahen.
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 22, 2008 18:37:47 GMT 5
waah Khaalid bhai qitta kehna koii aap se seekhe, bahut achha kaha hai aap ne. Sunita Behn! MaiN Khalid Saheb ko "Hazir-ul-Kalaam Shaer" kehta hooN, zra si tehreek miltai hai Hazrat aik Qataa daagh detay haiN.
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Post by khalid on Apr 22, 2008 18:50:15 GMT 5
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 22, 2008 19:14:16 GMT 5
Sir hamari majaal keh daad qabool na karaiN! Salis kia ham tau 100 baar bhi aap ki daad ko qabool karaiN gay! Asal aap ki dil aazari mera maqSad hargiz nahiN tha (Az hudd maazrat) balkeh maiN Sunita behn ki observation ko acknowledge kar raha tha, buss yehi gustakhi mujh say sar zadd ho gayee..... Kaan pakaR kay tauba karta hooN keh aaienda aisi ghalati nahiN ho gi........ Lijiay paanch lakeeraiN bhi nikali haiN naak say..........
Aap ki iss baat ki bhi maiN taeed karta hoon keh "Lughat Aamaiz" shaeri karna koi bahaduri ki baat nahiN.
Asar kaisay na ho unn maiN, jo mujh par lafz utartay haiN UnhaiN chaahat ki chhalni say mera munn chhan laita hai
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Apr 22, 2008 21:08:56 GMT 5
Hindi MatroN par likhi hoe is behr ki rawani hamesha say bahut shuara ko mutasir karti aei hay isnshah nay apnay rang mein is ko ranga aur nasir kazmi ki kitab Pehli Barish mein nasir nay apnay andaz mein us rawan behr mein likha jahan ye rawan aur mutaranam berh hay wahan is ka masla bhi is ki rawani he hay ke is ki rawani mein qalaam thirakta chala jata hay aut takhleeq kahin peechay reh jati hay is ghazal kay sath bhi yehi hoa thirakti hoe is ghazal mein rachao tu hay magar khialat kay etabar say yakrangi fiza hay.
aqeel
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Post by saeed on Apr 23, 2008 4:50:51 GMT 5
Aatif saab,
Behr khoobsoorat hai lekin is ghazal pe nazr-e-saani ki zroorat hai.
Misaal ke tor pe…meine aapke second last sher pe (khiyal ko madd-e-nazar rakhtey hooey) mashwarey ki juratt ki hai ……
Jab bhi mujhko tu yad aaya Jhank ke dilke ander dekha
Ab dekhen pehley misra zra sa badla hai, khayal wohi hai:
Jab jab tujhko dekhna chaha Jhank ke dilke ander dekha
Ye sirf aur sirf aik dostana mashwara hai!
Khush rahen, Saeed
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Post by khalid on Apr 23, 2008 6:12:10 GMT 5
Sir hamari majaal keh daad qabool na karaiN! Salis kia ham tau 100 baar bhi aap ki daad ko qabool karaiN gay! Asal aap ki dil aazari mera maqSad hargiz nahiN tha (Az hudd maazrat) balkeh maiN Sunita behn ki observation ko acknowledge kar raha tha, buss yehi gustakhi mujh say sar zadd ho gayee..... Kaan pakaR kay tauba karta hooN keh aaienda aisi ghalati nahiN ho gi........ Lijiay paanch lakeeraiN bhi nikali haiN naak say..........
Aap ki iss baat ki bhi maiN taeed karta hoon keh "Lughat Aamaiz" shaeri karna koi bahaduri ki baat nahiN.
Asar kaisay na ho unn maiN, jo mujh par lafz utartay haiN UnhaiN chaahat ki chhalni say mera munn chhan laita hai yaar aap kin chakkaroN meiN peR gaey??? maiN ne to wo baat sochi tak nahiN jo aap ne mehsoos ki. aap waqaii aik hassaas shaair haiN. mujhey ager koii baat buri lagey to foruN keh deita hooN (I don't beat about the bush) iss liye aapko pareshaan honey ki zaroorat nahiN hai.
aapka she'r koob hai! kis kis cheez ki daad dooN aapko???
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