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Post by Aqeel Malik on Nov 15, 2007 18:29:14 GMT 5
Razi sahab!
aik arsay baad ana hoa kuch masroofiat aisi rahi ke waqt nahi nikal paya. ap ki nazm ka matalia kia nazm ka makalmati nizam bara umda hay aur ibham ka hawala bari mazboti say justify kia hay magar nazm ki manwi tafheem itni khul gae hay ke nazm spot lagti hay aik do jagah par wazn say chok gaey hein nazm is baat ka taqaza karti hay ke is par aik baar nazr e sani ki jaey, majmoee taur par nazm ka flow qaree ko sath lay kar chalta hay.
aqeel
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Post by Sukhanwar on Nov 15, 2007 23:37:51 GMT 5
Razi sahab! aik arsay baad ana hoa kuch masroofiat aisi rahi ke waqt nahi nikal paya. ap ki nazm ka matalia kia nazm ka makalmati nizam bara umda hay aur ibham ka hawala bari mazboti say justify kia hay magar nazm ki manwi tafheem itni khul gae hay ke nazm spot lagti hay aik do jagah par wazn say chok gaey hein nazm is baat ka taqaza karti hay ke is par aik baar nazr e sani ki jaey, majmoee taur par nazm ka flow qaree ko sath lay kar chalta hay. aqeel aqeel bohat arsay baad aap ko yahandaykhkar khushi hui aur is laiy bhi khushi hui k main aik muddat sy aik hi jaysay tabsray parh raha tha khul kar baat nahinho rahi thee aap ny nazmpar jo baylaag tabsra kia mujhay acha laga jahantak waznka muaamla hy mera khyaal hy aap ko lafz TUMHARI k istamaal par aytraaz ho ga main ny jab yeh nazm paste kar dee to mujhay maloom hua k "chahat tumhari" ki jaga "tumhari chaha" likha gia socha isay drust kar doon ga magar image ko change karnay say main zara susti kar jata hoon koi aur khami bhi ho to nishan dahi zaroor karain main apni ghalati tasleemkarnay mainkabhi aar mehsoos nahin karta thanx razi
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Nov 16, 2007 16:43:14 GMT 5
mein isi expression ki baat kar raha tha wo mein nay khud bhi kar lia tha magar bawajood us kay misra dheela hay aur nazm bhi kuch kuch kasao ki kimi ka shikar hay mujhy aisa laga hosakta hay ke mujh aisa mehsoos hoa ho
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Post by dnangrani on Nov 19, 2007 2:49:05 GMT 5
Razi saheb Pahle aapka shukriya ada kar loon mujhe is manch par phir se aane ke liye.
achanak ye bhi kho jaaye sukoon se main bhi so jaaon
Sunder nazm ke liye daad ho
devi
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Post by Sukhanwar on Nov 19, 2007 22:31:59 GMT 5
Razi saheb Pahle aapka shukriya ada kar loon mujhe is manch par phir se aane ke liye. achanak ye bhi kho jaaye sukoon se main bhi so jaaon Sunder nazm ke liye daad ho devi bohat shukria devi ji k aap ny pasandeedgi ka izhaar kia thanx razi
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Post by Atif Mirza on May 13, 2008 0:00:11 GMT 5
Razi Sahib! Aaj dopehr iss nazm ko paRhtay paRhtay reh gaya magar shaam ko aap say bilmushafa sun'nay ka ittefaq huwa. Maza aya sun kar aur dobala huwa ab paRh kar. Bohut khoobsoorat! shukria atif bhai razi Aik baar phir daad hasir hai.....
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Post by neha on Jul 24, 2008 22:15:03 GMT 5
Wah Razi bhai ...kia kamal ki nazam likhy hai aap nay k padhnay wala kho sa jaye is main I m really impressed...aap ki shairy dil ko chu lenay wali hoty hai..bht khubsurat aur mukaaml nazam hai muhabbat par...mery taraf se daad qubool kijye.
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Post by jooni on Jul 26, 2008 7:46:01 GMT 5
Razi Sahib, Adaab. Abhi namaz-e-fajr k ba'ad, garam chai k cup k saath ap ki "Mukalmati Nazm" parhi. Nashtay ka maza aa gaya. Mohabbat ki khoobsoorti iss k "MUBHAM" honay main hi hai, laikin khwahish hamaisha yehi hoti hai keh Mohabbat "WAZEH" ho. Boht hi "TAAZGI" hai ap ki nazm main. Ye line to dil ko chhoo gaii; " Kisi k hont ka larzan kinara bhi, dilon main moj'zann jazbon ki har tafseel se agaah karta hai" aur " Yahan jo dil ki dunyan hai, agar abaad ho ja'ay, boht veeraan hoti hai". Boht Khoob Razi Sahib. Dhair saari daad qubool kijiye. Razi Bhaii, Pakistan aa raha hoon. 28 july, do-pehr 1 bjay, islamabad, aur aglay din ya'ni 29 july ko LAYYAH pohnchoon ga, insha-Allah. Koshish kroon ga aur Khwahish hai keh "SUKHANWAR" k jin doston se mumkin ho, bil-mushafa mulaqat ho ja'ay, agar aap dost pasand krain to. Boht shukriya.
Junaid Sikandar
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jul 27, 2008 0:09:33 GMT 5
Wah Razi bhai ...kia kamal ki nazam likhy hai aap nay k padhnay wala kho sa jaye is main I m really impressed...aap ki shairy dil ko chu lenay wali hoty hai..bht khubsurat aur mukaaml nazam hai muhabbat par...mery taraf se daad qubool kijye. neha aap ki daad mosool hui aap ko nazm pasand aai aur aap ny khul kar pasandeedgi ka izhaar bhi kia main is par aap ka mamnoon hoon thanx razi
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jul 27, 2008 0:13:31 GMT 5
Razi Sahib, Adaab. Abhi namaz-e-fajr k ba'ad, garam chai k cup k saath ap ki "Mukalmati Nazm" parhi. Nashtay ka maza aa gaya. Mohabbat ki khoobsoorti iss k "MUBHAM" honay main hi hai, laikin khwahish hamaisha yehi hoti hai keh Mohabbat "WAZEH" ho. Boht hi "TAAZGI" hai ap ki nazm main. Ye line to dil ko chhoo gaii; " Kisi k hont ka larzan kinara bhi, dilon main moj'zann jazbon ki har tafseel se agaah karta hai" aur " Yahan jo dil ki dunyan hai, agar abaad ho ja'ay, boht veeraan hoti hai". Boht Khoob Razi Sahib. Dhair saari daad qubool kijiye. Razi Bhaii, Pakistan aa raha hoon. 28 july, do-pehr 1 bjay, islamabad, aur aglay din ya'ni 29 july ko LAYYAH pohnchoon ga, insha-Allah. Koshish kroon ga aur Khwahish hai keh "SUKHANWAR" k jin doston se mumkin ho, bil-mushafa mulaqat ho ja'ay, agar aap dost pasand krain to. Boht shukriya. Junaid Sikandar junaid aap ko nazm pasand aai aur is nay aap k naashtay ka maza bhi dobala kar dia lijiay sahab humain humain aap ki is bay saakhta daad ka lutf aa gia aap layyah aa rahay hain to multan bhi aain hum aap k muntazir rahain gy main aap ko apna cell no pm kar raha hoon zaroor mulakaat ho gi thanx razi
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Post by kanwal on Jul 30, 2008 22:44:31 GMT 5
bohat arsay baad doston k liay aik mukaalmaati nazm laaya hoon aap ki aaraa ka muntazir rahoon ga thanx razi Bohat khubsoorat ,...
Umdaa ,...
Daad ke saare gulshan Aapki iss dilnasheeN nazM ke naaM ,...
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Post by ramishjaan on Jul 30, 2008 23:23:11 GMT 5
AOA ARZI bhai yeh kab howa kese howa mujhe bohat achi tarha yad he ke ap ki is shahkar nazm par me ne apni kefiyat ka badi tafseel se izhar kiya tha magar aj dobara parhte howe dekha ke humara text door door tak nahi khair kahin hum se hi koi bhol chok ho gai ho gi .. Razi bhai yeh nazm nahi bohat so ke dilo ki dharkan he un ki soch ka aks he mujhe bohat dafa ap ka klam parhte howe mehsos ke jese ap ne meri soch ko alfaz de diye aur us waqt to khushi ka ehsas bohat barh jata he jab ap meri mohabat ko Alfaz m edhal kar mere hi smane le atte hai,n razi bhai ap ki is nazm ka aik aik lafz mere dil me dharkan ban kar bas geya he ab is shandar ghzal ke liye me dad ke phool lao,n bhi to kaha se aur kitne bas you samjh li jiye ke dil ki har dharkan se dad aur har sans ke sath ap ke liye duaa .................................... waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by Sukhanwar on Aug 1, 2008 1:32:12 GMT 5
bohat arsay baad doston k liay aik mukaalmaati nazm laaya hoon aap ki aaraa ka muntazir rahoon ga thanx razi Bohat khubsoorat ,...
Umdaa ,...
Daad ke saare gulshan Aapki iss dilnasheeN nazM ke naaM ,... kanwal boht shukria is pazeeraai ka razi
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