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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 5, 2008 14:32:59 GMT 5
Yaraan e Sukhanwar, Adaab o Sallam! Aik taza Ghazal pesh kar raha hooN,apki qeemati aaraa ka intezar rahe ga. w.s Akif .......................
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Post by Atif Mirza on Jul 5, 2008 20:30:53 GMT 5
Wah Malik saheb aik umda ghazal paish ki hai aap nay. Daad qabool kijia.
Chata sher maiN "chahtoN ko mairay" ki bajaay "chahtoN ko mairi" ho jaay tau aap ka sher durust ho jaay ga. Ab maaloom nahiN keh yeh imla ki ghalati hai ya..........
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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 5, 2008 22:26:42 GMT 5
Aatif Bhayee, Daad key liey shukriya,aur ghalati ki nishandahi ka bhee,yeh composing ki ghalti hai darust kar dooN ga.Shukriya w.s Akif Wah Malik saheb aik umda ghazal paish ki hai aap nay. Daad qabool kijia.
Chata sher maiN "chahtoN ko mairay" ki bajaay "chahtoN ko mairi" ho jaay tau aap ka sher durust ho jaay ga. Ab maaloom nahiN keh yeh imla ki ghalati hai ya..........
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jul 5, 2008 23:20:40 GMT 5
Bohat Khoob malik sahib
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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 6, 2008 2:29:34 GMT 5
Bahut bahut Shukriya, Rafi Tabsum Jee
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Post by rooh on Jul 6, 2008 14:11:26 GMT 5
Akif ji salam...
achii ghazal hai..aur khas taur par matla....bahot achha khayal hai...
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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 6, 2008 16:25:56 GMT 5
Bahut Bahut Shukriya ROOH JEE Akif ji salam... achii ghazal hai..aur khas taur par matla....bahot achha khayal hai...
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Jul 6, 2008 18:44:35 GMT 5
akif gee aap ki gazal main aik dawa hay keh her misray ka rang alag ho ga.lakin haqeeqat main aisa naheen hay.sirf matla qabel e qabool hay.lakin khayal pamal hay 1000 saal purana islami sipasalaroon kay zamaney ka.dosra aik keh sath misray naheen aata misra aata hay.main fazool tareef naheen karoon ga kunkeh aap sunjeeda shier maloom hotay hain.aap ki ghazal main sirf aik khubi hay keh yeh wazan main hay. faelun mfaelun faelun mfaelun
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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 7, 2008 14:41:13 GMT 5
Janab e MoHteram, Suhail Abbas Khan sb, Assalam o allaikum! Mamnoon o mutashakur hooN keh ap ney mere nacheez ki adna see ghazal par tabSura farmaya.JehaN tak khial ka ta'aluq hai bila shuba woh maiN ne tariq bin ziad se akhz kia hai jabkeh khial kabhi naya ya purana naheeN hota.doosri taraf ,MaiN ney aik aik miSre ko rang juda dene ka dawa naheeN kiya balkeh agar aap sher ko baghaur parHeiN tau is sher se shayer yani meri khahish ka iZhar ho raha hai keh mere aik aik miSre ka rang juda ho na keh dawe ka.Aur jehaN tak miSra aur miSre ka ta'aluq hai tau mere khial meiN tau miSre hee behtar lagta hai kiooN keh agar aik aik miSra boleiN ge tau ajeeb hee lage ga. Fazul tareef ka maiN bhee qaael naheeN aur SaHeeH tanqeed ka khanda peshani se tasleem karte hooyee apni iSlaH ki koshish karta hooN. w.s Akif
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Jul 8, 2008 19:51:14 GMT 5
Akif gee Aaftab e Daag main daag ka aik do ghazla hay.pehli ghazal ka matla hay jiss nay humaray dil ka namuna dikha diya uss aaienay ko khak main uss nay mila diya (15 sher) dosrii ghazal ka matla hay inkar e may kashi nay mujay kya maza diya seenay peh char keh uss nay khum e may pila diya (17 sher) ghazal main ager afaal e murukba ya imdadi afaal radeef or kafya main istaymaal karain tu unn say ziyada manii payda kernay ki kosish ki jati hay. aab ghazal ka jadeed door hay ya zaban kay kmalat hoon ya achootay kyalat.meri muraad thi keh aab wafa o jafa ka zamana lud giya.koii acha sher nikalain.aap pukhtaa ghazal go maloom hotay hain.agar meri koii baat burii lagay tu mazrat kha hoon.mujay urdu say muhabat hay iss liey dukhal dur maqulaat kerta rehta hoon.ager classical ghazal ki turz main likhna hay tu daag say aagay jaian.ager jadeed rumai ghazal main likhna hay tu ahmed mushtaq say aagay jaian.zaban key tajerbay kernay hoon tu zafar iqbaal say aagay qadam berhain.meri muraad jidat hay.werna tu calssical ghazal main bhii jadeed ashaar mil jatay hain.mirza muzhar jan e jana ka sher hay. khuda kay wastay uss koon na tokoo yehii iik sher main qatil bacha hay
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Post by Akif Ghani Malik on Jul 11, 2008 14:20:37 GMT 5
MoHteram Suhail Abbas sb, Assalam o allaikum! Apka tabSura sar ankhooN par, mujhe kissi ki koyee baat buri naheeN lagti.Main bhee urdu ka ashiq aur aik adna sa talib e ilm hooN lehaza seekhne ke amal meiN tanqeed o tabSura sab kuch khush dili se bardasht karta hooN.Baqi sher o adab ka safar jari hai deikheiN is safar meiN kis kis muqam se guzarte haiN. w.s Akif Akif gee Aaftab e Daag main daag ka aik do ghazla hay.pehli ghazal ka matla hay jiss nay humaray dil ka namuna dikha diya uss aaienay ko khak main uss nay mila diya (15 sher) dosrii ghazal ka matla hay inkar e may kashi nay mujay kya maza diya seenay peh char keh uss nay khum e may pila diya (17 sher) ghazal main ager afaal e murukba ya imdadi afaal radeef or kafya main istaymaal karain tu unn say ziyada manii payda kernay ki kosish ki jati hay. aab ghazal ka jadeed door hay ya zaban kay kmalat hoon ya achootay kyalat.meri muraad thi keh aab wafa o jafa ka zamana lud giya.koii acha sher nikalain.aap pukhtaa ghazal go maloom hotay hain.agar meri koii baat burii lagay tu mazrat kha hoon.mujay urdu say muhabat hay iss liey dukhal dur maqulaat kerta rehta hoon.ager classical ghazal ki turz main likhna hay tu daag say aagay jaian.ager jadeed rumai ghazal main likhna hay tu ahmed mushtaq say aagay jaian.zaban key tajerbay kernay hoon tu zafar iqbaal say aagay qadam berhain.meri muraad jidat hay.werna tu calssical ghazal main bhii jadeed ashaar mil jatay hain.mirza muzhar jan e jana ka sher hay. khuda kay wastay uss koon na tokoo yehii iik sher main qatil bacha hay
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