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Post by Sukhanwar on Mar 5, 2008 23:35:24 GMT 5
aik taaza ghaza lrafi tabasum sahib aap ki nazr karta hoon
aaj kirnon ny jo her samt say ghayra hy mujhy us nay bhar poor nazar say abhi daykha hy mujhy
main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy
taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy
ho k taqseem bhi saara teri jholi main gira too nay kuch itnay saleeqay sy jo maanga hy mujhay
kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay
razi ud din razi
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Mar 6, 2008 0:07:01 GMT 5
aik taaza ghaza lrafi tabasum sahib aap ki nazr karta hoon aaj kirnon ny jo her samt say ghayra hy mujhy us nay bhar poor nazar say abhi daykha hy mujhy main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy ho k taqseem bhi saara teri jholi main gira too nay kuch itnay saleeqay sy jo maanga hy mujhay kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay razi ud din razi Razi Bhai aap ki yeh khoobsoorat ghazalmeray liay aik aezaaz hay bohat bohat shukria
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Post by Tanweer on Mar 6, 2008 14:35:24 GMT 5
Razi Sahib!
Aapka Rafi sahib k liey nazrana bohat khoobsurat hay.
Daad qabool kejiey.
Tanweer
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Post by suhelulfat on Mar 6, 2008 14:48:55 GMT 5
aik taaza ghaza lrafi tabasum sahib aap ki nazr karta hoon aaj kirnon ny jo her samt say ghayra hy mujhy us nay bhar poor nazar say abhi daykha hy mujhy main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy ho k taqseem bhi saara teri jholi main gira too nay kuch itnay saleeqay sy jo maanga hy mujhay kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay razi ud din razi Razi bhaaii bahut khoob ghazal kahii hai aapne...saadii si pyaarii si...! Suhel 'Ulfat'
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Mar 6, 2008 15:43:49 GMT 5
Razi sahab
bahut umda ghazal hay aur ghazal chonkeh Rafi sahab kay nam hay is leay is sher nay do jehtoN say mujhy maza dia
main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy
aik tu dr sahab ki tabiat kay sath mail khata hoa sher hay aur dosra is ka apna dakhli mizaj jis kay soty kahin door apni riwayat say ja k photty hein
is ky ilawa
taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy
aur jahan ashk ko zindagi ki bataur alamat baat ki hay tu is ka jawab nahi
aqeel malik
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Post by khalid on Mar 7, 2008 3:51:16 GMT 5
bohot khoob razi bhaii!! ghazal zabadarst hai! ho skta hai k ab rafi sb ko angiography bhi na kervaani paRey! ;D
daad qubool keeje!
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Post by Sukhanwar on Mar 7, 2008 9:25:13 GMT 5
aik taaza ghaza lrafi tabasum sahib aap ki nazr karta hoon aaj kirnon ny jo her samt say ghayra hy mujhy us nay bhar poor nazar say abhi daykha hy mujhy main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy ho k taqseem bhi saara teri jholi main gira too nay kuch itnay saleeqay sy jo maanga hy mujhay kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay razi ud din razi Razi Bhai aap ki yeh khoobsoorat ghazalmeray liay aik aezaaz hay bohat bohat shukriarafi sahib aap ki muhabaton ka shukria
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Post by Sukhanwar on Mar 7, 2008 23:51:40 GMT 5
Razi Sahib! Aapka Rafi sahib k liey nazrana bohat khoobsurat hay. Daad qabool kejiey. Tanweershukria tanweer bhai
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Post by Sukhanwar on Mar 8, 2008 0:15:21 GMT 5
aik taaza ghaza lrafi tabasum sahib aap ki nazr karta hoon aaj kirnon ny jo her samt say ghayra hy mujhy us nay bhar poor nazar say abhi daykha hy mujhy main kabhi aankh macholi bhi nahin jeeta hoon dhoondnay walay nay her baar hi dhoonda hy mujhy taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy ho k taqseem bhi saara teri jholi main gira too nay kuch itnay saleeqay sy jo maanga hy mujhay kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay razi ud din razi Razi bhaaii bahut khoob ghazal kahii hai aapne...saadii si pyaarii si...! Suhel 'Ulfat' suhail bhai ghazal ki aap nay tareef ki is ka shukria mujhy to khushi is baat ki hy k aaj aik muddat k baad aap ki ko post nazar sy guzri bhaai aatay raha karain na yahan thanx razi
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Post by saeed on Mar 8, 2008 8:29:41 GMT 5
Razi bhai achi kavish hai....ye sher khasker acha laga .
taa rahay ashk bahanay ki riwayat zinda teray hotay huay marnay ki tamanna hay mujhy (halanke hamarey school of thought ka nahen;-)
Jahan tak marney aur maarney ka taaluq hai to...Faraz sb ki nei kitab "A ishq-e-janoon pesha" mein Ghalib ki riwayat ka eik maqta hai...
Ham to chahat mein bhi ghalib ke muqallid hain Faraz Jispe martey hain usey maar ke rakh detey hain
buhut daad!! saeed
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Post by kanwal on Mar 14, 2008 3:10:44 GMT 5
Waaah ,.... Umdaa ,.... Razi jee aap kamaal ka likhte ho ,... YuN mehsoos hota hai jaise kaaghaz par nahiN balke diloN par aapka Qalam chal raha hai ,.... Umdaaa ,.... iss haseeN thofe ke liye daad ke hazaaro phooL aapke Qalam ke naaM ,....
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Post by ramishjaan on Mar 14, 2008 3:19:19 GMT 5
AOA qable ehtram razi bahi ..................... keya hi khosborat gahzal atta ki he khobsorat kion na hoti is ki 3 wajhoat jo hain .............
1- khobsorat soch our khobseerat insan ne likhi ..........
2- bohat khobsorat jazbe yani dosti ke liye likhi gai .........
3 - aik bohat hi nafees mukhlis isnan dost our inthei qable ehtram dost rafi sahib ke liye likhi gai ..................................
so razi bhai ap ke itne khobsorat jazbe ki nazr karne ke liye mujh jese tifle maktab ke pas dad ke phool kaha bas aik duaa he ke ALLHA kare ap ka qalam hamesha esi schayiaN likhta rahe is bazm me hamehsa dr rafi shaib jese mukhlis insan atta rahe our ap ki yeh bazm ap ka yeh chaman isi tarha mehkta rahe ameen ..............
razi bahi chamne qalb ki gehraion se bohat sari douayen ap ki nazr waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by waqaar on Mar 14, 2008 14:41:47 GMT 5
kon hay mayri tara raah say bhatka raahi dasht main aaj razi kis nay pukaara hy mujhay Razi SaaHeb, kYa 'ajab akelagi ka khaakah kh~iiNcha hay aapnay. bahut hii aCHh~ii ghazal. meri dilii daad qubool kee jiYay. aapki baat Yaad aa,ii keh waaq'a,ii saadgi maiN hii khoobSoorati hay. waQaar
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Shaheen
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From City of Eagles
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Post by Shaheen on Mar 14, 2008 18:13:46 GMT 5
Razi Saheb, maiN kia tabsra karooN aap ki iss ghazal per k na maiN shaer na adeeb ya likhari aur na hi kisi qism ka artist keh hiss-e-jamaliat ki daulat meray paas hoti. magar aik ezaz hasil hai ke maiN kaiee shaeroN ki dosti ka dam bharta hooN. Aap ki shaeri maiN na jaanay kia hai jo khaich raha hai uss jazbay ki taraf keh maiN bhi shaeri shuroo kar dooN. Itni khoobsoorat ghazal kahi hai aap nay keh maiN sakht mutassir huwa. Daad zaroori hai.
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Post by Atif Mirza on Mar 14, 2008 18:19:43 GMT 5
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