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Post by kanwal on Aug 21, 2008 2:20:04 GMT 5
jahan tak mujhy yaad parrta hy aaj kanwal ki shadi hona thee aur ab tak to ho bhi gaai ho gi kanwal ko us ki shaadi par dili mubarak baad dijiay salam ,...
Bohat bohat shurkiya razi jee ke Aap ne iss nacheez ki khushi ko yaad rakha ,....
lagta hai mere eham kaamoN meiN koi na koi bari shakhsiyat be chaari maari jaati hai,...
jaise k kaha jaata hai k main hui to bhuto sahib aage nikal gaye, yani 4th april 79, shaadi uss din hui jab sunna hai janaab ziya ul haQ sahib Aage ho liye aur ab musharaf sahib ne bhi shayed issi liye resign kar diya,... ::)lagta hai unhein meri history ka pata tha ,.........
khair yeh to mazaak tha, meri shadi 17th ko hui, ....hmm ,...
shadi ka ehwaal ,...
meri masroofiyaat ne mujhe aane na diya ,...
khair mukhtasarin ehwaal yeh hai ke ,...
15th ko mehndi thi, miyaN jee bhi aaye the to ikhathi kar li ,...
17th ko shadi thi, jo Khuda talah ke fazl o karam se bohat acha programm raha aur khoob sab ne enjoy kiya ,....
aur aaj yani 20 august ko walima tha jiski wapsi pe main ghar aayee hooN aur thora sa waqt nikaal ke chand satoor likh paa rai hooN ke abhi sab aa jaayein gemujhe gherne, kal waapis unke sath chali jaaoNgi ,...
afsos ke main hangame meiN apna mobile na leja saki jiski bina pe razi jee aapko khabar na kar saki maazrat,...
Phir bhi Aapne yaad rakha dekh kar khushi hui, yeh chhoti choti khushyoN ke jugnoo hi kaali andheri raat meiN manzil ki khabr dete haiN ,...
Meri iss nayee zindagi ke aaghaaz meiN mujhe Aap sab ki duaeiN ki bohat zaroorat hai ,...
Mukhtasarin ehwaal to yehi hai aur kuch poochna ho to main haazir hooN jaise hi waqt aur mauqa milla doobara aaongi abhi filhaal 5 mint hi de sakti thi ,...
Aapki dheroN duaoN aur khaloos ke liye thank you ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 14, 2008 1:02:52 GMT 5
Salam ,...
Sab se pehle to maazrat ke takheer se iss Sisile meiN shirkat kar rahi hooN,...
kya karooN mayooN pe baithne pe Net aur phone sakhti se manna hai ,... bas chori chhupke aa gayee hooN thori si der ke liye ,.......
Sabka taruf dekh kar acha laga to socha apna bhi karwaa dooN ,....
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Post by kanwal on Aug 14, 2008 0:57:38 GMT 5
Salam ,...
Aap Ehbaab ko jashn e Aazadi Mubarak ,....
Masroofiyat ki binaa pe main aa nahiN paa rahi lekin socha Jashn e Aazadi pe Aap sab ko Mubarakbaad keh dooN apni aik puraani tehreer hi laga dooN ke iss baar sar khujaane ko bhi fursat nahiN mil rahi ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 14, 2008 0:40:28 GMT 5
Bohat umdaa ,...
Meena jee, bohat khubsoorati aur gehraayee jhalakti hai iss meiN, real meiN aik larki ki feelings ki akaasi karti nazr aati hai Aapki yeh nazM ,....
masroofiyat ki bina pe aajkal main aa nahiN paa rahi, abhi bhi chori chhupe thori der ke liye aayee hooN ,....
to Aapki nazM dekh ke khud ko reply se na rok saki,...
iss pyari nazM par daad e guL Aapki nazR ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 4, 2008 0:41:13 GMT 5
Kanwal! Aap ki ghazal main soch aur khayaal hai. Achhchhay aur saadaa say jazbaat haiN aap ki shaeri main. Daad qabool kijiay.
Thank You Atif jee ,...theek hai ,...
i agree ,... [/i][/size][/font][/color] Muhabbat --- ke jhoote --- saraboN --- me rehna Humay raa---s aaya --- n khaabo --- me rehnaYeh sher taqtee kay mutabiq bilkul theek hai. Muhabbat --- me tairi --- yu lagta --- hai jaisay Muqadar --- hai apna --- azaabo --- me rehnaRoman main yeh bilkul theek wazan main hai. Laikin Urdu image main yeh ghalat likha huwa hai. WahaN hai:-
Iss chaahat main teri yooN lagta hai jaisay
Jo keh wazan say kharij hai. Kindly Urdu image durust kijiay.[/quote] Aap ne shayed not nahiN kiya Rafi jee ne reply kiya tha k
Khoobsoorat Ghazal Kanwal ji ksisi kisis shae main kuch mas,ala mehsoos hota hay jaisay dosray shaer kay pehlay misray maiN
to ussi garbar ko maine dhoond liya aur likha k:
Salam, & Thank you Rafi jee ,...
Main tah e dil se Aapki shukr guzaar hooN ke Aapne meri tawajah iss misre ki tarf dilwaayee ,...
JahaN talak mujhe samjh aayee woh garbar shuru meiN hai ghaliban, to issko Maine usse ab kuch yuN kar liya hai ,...
Muhabbat meiN teri yuN lagta hai jaise Muqadar hai apna azaaboN meiN rehna
Bas waqt ki kami ke baic image na tabdeel kar saki ,....
InshallaH ab pehla kaam yehi karoongi ,...hmm,...
YahaaN maine Aadaab nahiN Adab ka zikr kiya tha, jiski jamaa adaaboN hoti ghaliban,...
Aik Aadaab to salam ko kehte haiN par adab bhi to hota hai na, yani saleeqa shu´ari ,...
Ab iss wasaasat se mujhe iss sher ke baare meiN bataiye, ... agar phir bhi yeh Qabil e Qabool nahiN to nikaal deiN ge issko ,... [/color][/quote] to kya yahaN ke (kaaf+badi ye) aani chahiye ,...?kaNwal khoon e dil kaaghazoN pe bahaa kar keh khushyoN ke phir tum naqaaboN meriN rehna
Main romman meiN ke (kaaf+yeh) aur k (kaaf+he) hi likhti hooN iss liye aapko shayed aisa laga, ...
doosra Aapne bohat acha kiya, i´m thankful 2 u ,...
Main Inshallah mazeed koshish karti rahoongi ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 4, 2008 0:05:53 GMT 5
KaNwal ki iss ghazal per Mohatrma Naheed Virk†nay apna intehaaee qeemti waqt sarf kar ka islaah ataa farmaaiee hai. Mujhay KaNwal aur Razi Sahib kay PM milay keh iss per apna tabsara karooN.
Thank you Atif jee ,...
Aapko Pm karne ka maqsad mehz yehi tha ke agar koi confusion hai to door ho jaaye, main to seekh rahi hooN, tifl e maktab hooN, behr ko ziyada jaanti pehchaanti nahiN so mujhe laga ke aap hi isse door kar sakte haiN ,...
Lihaaza mujhe yeh dekh kar khushi hui ke Aapne apne qeemati waqt meiN se kuch ghariyaaN nikaal kar meri tooti phooti tehreer ki nok palak saNwaar di ,....
Thank you jee ,... Be shaQ maine Aapke mashware ko sanjeedagi se pehle bhi lia tha aur ab bhi, INSHALLAH main main baqaaidgi se parhti rahoongi ,....[/i][/size][/font][/color] Dear Kanwal, main ne aap kee ye ghazal paRhi aur pasaNd aayi tau daad dene haazir ho gai. iss ke saath saath maiN ne aap ko ghazal ko behr meN karne kii aik koshish kee hai. choonke aap ne ghazal kahee hai aur ghazal ke liye aik khaas meter huvaa kartaa hai jis ke wazn ke palaRe meN she'r kahe jaate haiN tau ise maiN ne behr meN likhaa hai, aap daikh lijiye. shukriya Naheed KaNwal! Tenssion not! Yeh islaah Naheed Ji nay khair sagaali kay jazbay kay teht di hai. Unn ki niyyat per shuba na karo aur issay bhi musbat lo.[/quote]
Ba Khuda maine aik pal ke liye bhi Naheed jee ke khaloos pe shaQ nahiN kiya, mera reaction normaly waisa hi tha jaisa aik bache ka tab ho sakta hai jab teacher usski math ki copy par 2+2= 5 likh de,... Ab wo bechaara to apna chota sa damaagh hi laraata hi rahe ga na ke 2+2= 5 kaise ho gaye?,....
So apna bhi kuch yehi confusion tha ,...
[/i][/size][/font][/color][/quote] beshaQ isski yehi behr hai ,... Mashwara Qabool Kiyaa jee ,...
Meri ko teri kar diya aur har tarf ko add kar liya ,...
Thank you jee ,...
Thank you ,...Thank you ,...
Razi jee ne bhi issi misre meiN yehi tabdeeli karwaayee hai, jo maine not kar li hai ,... hmmm,...
Theek maine taseeH kar li hai iss sher ki ,...thanx ,.... Thank you so much Atif jee ,...
Yaqeenan ab koi confusion baaqi nahiN rahi ,...
Aap agar iss taraH nishaan dahi kar diya kareiN to naye seekhne waaloN ke liye aik haseeN tohfaa hoga Aapki tarf se, aur jab bhi unke kaam ko saraaha jaaye ga uss meiN Aapke liye bas duaeiN hi duaeiN hoNgi, ...
Aur mere nazdeek yeh ghaate ka sauda to nahiN ,...
Aik baar phir se iss help ke liye main dil ki gehraiyoN se Aap ki shukr guzaar hooN,
[/i][/size][/font][/color][/quote] Naheed jee ki main bhi be had shukr guzaar hooN ke unhi ke tuafail Sukhanwar pe yeh Silsila shuru hua ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 3, 2008 23:08:12 GMT 5
main nay kanwal ki ghazal bhi parhi aur us k hawalay sy naheed sahiba k reply bhi naheed sahiba main aap ki tashee sy mutafiq nahin hun Thank You Razi jee ke Aap ne apne qeemati waqt meiN se kuch saa´teiN humari adnaa si ghazL ke naaM kiN ,... Sorry razi jee ,.....
Mera matlab bhi to "Faa´i´"Nothing"" tha na, ab ye zer paish meiN main confuse ho jaati hooN ,...
haaN hindsoN meiN mujhe asaani rehti hai, dekhiye maine Fa´oo´"Nothing" hota to 122´ jabke maine likha tha: 212´212´212´212´ hi likha hai, Bas yeh "u" aur "i" ke chakar meiN par gayee ,... thank you Razi jee ,...
i wíll ,... Thank you Razi jee ,...
be shaQ ghaltiyoN ko maan kar sudhaarne waale hi asl meiN insaan hote haiN,...
Mujhe khushi hui ke mujhe apni iss ghazL se seekhne ko milla, aur jo meri ghazl ki kamzoriyaaN thiN woh ayaaN ho ke unki islaah ki gayee ,...
Main aainda mazeed khayaal rakha karooNgi beshaQ maine aapke Forum se hi bohat kuch seekha hai, ....
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Post by kanwal on Aug 3, 2008 22:46:07 GMT 5
Kanwal, aap kee ghazal aap kee bataayee huyee behr par fit naheeN aati hai. aap agar apni ghazal se mutma'in haiN tau please meree post disregard kar dijiye. shukriya Naheed bohat hi mohtaram Naheed jee ,...
Mera Khuda jaanta hai ke maine sach kaha tha ke mujhe Aapka andaaz acha laga ,...
Mujhe yaad nahiN parta ke kab maine kaha main apni ghazl se mutmain hooN, my dear insaan jahaN par mutmain ho jaaye wahiN se usske liye pataal ka rasta khul jaata hai, Jiss tarah yeh kaha jaata hai ke:
NO BODY IS PERFECT; but only Mohammad SW
ussi tarah yeh bhi haQ hai ke mutmain hone waali zaat sirf aur sirf aik hi hai, so maine to khud kaha tha k:
Main to post hi issi liyye karti hooN take Aap jaise seniors mujh jaisi tifl emaktab ki help kar sakeiN,....
Na mujhe Aapka kehna bura laga aur na mujhe Aap ka andaaz, Bas Aapne jo islaah ki uss se main thori confuse si ho gayee,... Iss ke ilawa wallaH aur koi baat na thi,....
Main to Aapki tahi dil se shukr guzaar hooN ke Aapki badaulat meri ghazl pe baat hui,... islaaH ki gayee ,...
Aap Khudara apne dil meiN koi baat na rakhiye ga, kyuNke mera dil saaf hai, aur Aapka shukr guzaar hai ,.....
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GHAZAL
Aug 3, 2008 22:32:31 GMT 5
Post by kanwal on Aug 3, 2008 22:32:31 GMT 5
Aik khubsoorat se khayaal par daad e guL Aapke liye ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 3, 2008 22:29:35 GMT 5
bohat khoob ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 3, 2008 22:27:53 GMT 5
very nice ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 2, 2008 1:29:44 GMT 5
Dear Kanwal, main ne aap kee ye ghazal paRhi aur pasaNd aayi tau daad dene haazir ho gai. Aapko pasand aayee jaan ke dilli khushi hui, thank you naheed jee ,... Bohat khushi hui naheed jee ke Aapne apne qeemati waqt meiN se kuch waqt nikaal kar iss ghazl ko behr meiN karne ki koshish ki,..........Be shaQ ghazl ka meter hona laazmi amar hai, Ab Aapne pata nahiN kaunsi behr nikaali hai, jabke mere khayaal se yeh iss behr meiN likhi gayee hai ,...
Faa´u´"Nothing"- Faa´u´"Nothing"- // Faa´u´"Nothing"- Faa´u´"Nothing" (212´212´// 212´212)
Aapka andaaz khaloos mujhe bohat acha laga naheed jee, Go k main khud Tifl e maktab hooN, main abhi seekhne ke maraahil meiN hooN, meri chhoti si maloomaat ki mad e nazr hi main iss ghazl ko doobara dekh rahi hooN, Aapke saamne,...
Aap khud bhi dekh lijiye ,...
Jaisa k maine kaha ke ghazl iss behr meiN likhi gayee hai to iss hisaab se huM dekhte haiN ,...
Faa´u´"Nothing"- Faa´u´"Nothing"- // Faa´u´"Nothing"- Faa´u´"Nothing" (212´212´// 212´212)
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- Main´hooN´tan´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- haa´i´hai´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- au´r´hai´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- Aa´s´maaN´-
Yeh to iss behr meiN fitt aa gaya ,.... good ab aate haiN doosre misre ki aur ,...
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- te´ri´yaa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- doN´ki´hai´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- har´so´oo´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- keh´ka´shaaN´-
YahaN main iss har soo ke "soo" se mutmain nahiN ho paa rahi kuynke mujhe sikhaaya gaya hai ke soo ka wazn "u" nahiN balke "faa" ya phir ""Nothing"" hi ho sakta hai kyuNke yeh aik mukamal lafz hai, aur wazni hai.Faa´u´"Nothing"´- jag´ma´gaa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- te´ye´si´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- taa´re´hii´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ? ´na´hiN´-
Ab yahaN huM SitaaroN ke "si" ko faa ke wazn pe iccept bhi kar leiN to bhi last rukan meiN aik harf missing hai,.. "?" pe kuch to aana chahiye na ,...
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- me´re´ap´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ne´bhi´haiN´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- unn´k´?´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- dar´mi´yaaN´-
yahaN par ? aik rukn khali hai ,...
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ko´i´saa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- thi´bhi´na´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ho´jab´doo´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´-r´tak´? Iss meiN "jab" aik wazni lafz hai yeh "u" ke muqaabil kaise aa sakta hai? ,... issi taraH "r" light hai jo Faa jaise wazni harf pe aaya hai, "tak" ka bhi "jab" wala haal hai aur aakhri rukan khaali hai ,.... Faa´u´"Nothing"´- to´ka´ho´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- kai´se´cha´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- le´phir´yeh´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´-kaa´r´vaaN´-
yahaqN mujhe chale aur phir ka wazn sahi nahiN laga ,...[/b][/color] Chaliye Aap kehti haiN to sochte haiN ,... Faa´u´"Nothing"´- jin´k´dil´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- meiN´chaa´hat´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- teiN´thiN´pyaa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- r´tha´? Iss meiN bhi chaahateiN ka "chaa" , "Faa" ke muqqabil aana chahiye jabke "U" ke muqabil hai. issi tarah pyaar ka "r" aur aakhri rukan khali hai. Faa´u´"Nothing"´- faa´s´le´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- aa´ye´ab´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- unn´k´?´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- dar´mi´yaaN´-
? khaali hai ,... [/b][/color] Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ab´ta´ras´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- te´haiN´hanS´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- see´ko´har´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ?´gha´ri´- Iss meiN aik rukan khali hai ,... Faa´u´"Nothing"´- hum´ka´bhi´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- reh´te´the´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- har´pal´shaa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´-d´maaN´? Iss meiN shaa´d´maaN ka wazn hai Faa´u´"Nothing"´jabke Aap ne kiye hai Faa´Faa´u´,.... isi tarah last rukn bhi khali hai.[/b][/color] Faa´u´"Nothing"´- jhil´mi´laa´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- te´inn´si´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- taa´roN´meiN´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ?´kaN´wal´- YahaN bhi "inn" aur khali rukan hai ,... Faa´u´"Nothing"´- dhooN´d´ti´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- hooN´main´khush´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- shi´ke´kuch´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´-´?´ni´shaaN´-
YahaN aik rukn khali hai ,... [/b][/color] Faa´u´"Nothing"´- mau´sa´me´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- gul´bhi´to´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- aa´ye´ga´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- ?´kaN´wal´-
YahaN bhi aik rukan khali hai,... Faa´u´"Nothing"´- yeh´cha´li´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- jaa´ye´gi´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´- aa´khir´khi´-
Faa´u´"Nothing"´-zaa´eiN´?
yahaN Aakhir ka wazn ghalt hai iska wazn Faa Faa ya Faa "Nothing" ho sakta hai Faa u kisi soorat nahiN [/b][/color] Naheed jee ,...
Meri iss gustaakhi ka plzz bura na manaaiye ga, ho sakta hai main ghalt hooN, be shaQ Aap bohat jaanti hai, ilm rakhti haiN, shayed Aapko samjhne meiN ya jaldi meiN ghalt fehmi ho gayee ho, be shaQ meri ghazl meiN ghaltiyaN hoNgi lekin jo jitna bhi mujhe samjh aaya maine keh diya,...
Aapne jiss muhabbat aur khaloos se meri islaah karne ki koshish ki hai wo haqeeqatan Qabil e fakhar hai, lekin plzz aap aik baar phir se dekh lijiye kiyoNke yeh mere seekhne ki umr hai ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 2, 2008 0:35:27 GMT 5
Kanwal Sahiba, Boht khoob. Maqta'a boht umda hai. Sun Kanwal aaye ga mausam-e- gul bhi ab Jaate jaate hi jaaye gi aakhir khizan Daad qubool kijiye. Junaid Sikandar Thank You so much jooni jee ,...
Aapki pasandeedgi aur hausla afzaayee ke liye bandi Aapki shukr guzaar hai ,....
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Post by kanwal on Aug 2, 2008 0:34:01 GMT 5
Bahut achhi ghazal hai KaNwal. Mazeed nikhaar lana chahti hai aap tau asaatiza ka kalaam paRhaiN. Bohat bohat shukriya Atif jee ,...
Aape saraha, hausla afzaayee ki aur saath meiN Aage barhne ki talqeen ki, mujhe bohat acha laga, haqeeqatan yehi andaaz islaahi, aur hausla afzaa ho sakta hai ,...
Lekin Aap agar nishaandahi kar dete to mazeed nikhaar laane meiN mujhe asaani hoti, main yeh nahiN kehti ke Aap usko badal ke bataate, Aap sirf yehi kehte agar ke kaNwal iss misre ko, iss sher ko doobara banaayeiN to mujhe asaani ho jaati,....
Khair DostoN ki duaeiN kaNwal ke saath rahiN to Khuda khud lafzoN meiN nikhaar bakhsh de ga ,...
iss khubsoorat reply ke liye Thank you so much ,...
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Post by kanwal on Aug 2, 2008 0:01:35 GMT 5
Khoobsoorat Ghazal Kanwal ji ksisi kisis shae main kuch mas,ala mehsoos hota hay jaisay dosray shaer kay pehlay misray maiN Salam, & Thank you Rafi jee ,...
Main tah e dil se Aapki shukr guzaar hooN ke Aapne meri tawajah iss misre ki tarf dilwaayee ,...
JahaN talak mujhe samjh aayee woh garbar shuru meiN hai ghaliban, to issko Maine usse ab kuch yuN kar liya hai ,...
Muhabbat meiN teri yuN lagta hai jaise Muqadar hai apna azaaboN meiN rehna
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