zehrab
rukn
ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
Posts: 125
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Post by zehrab on Jan 18, 2008 11:52:59 GMT 5
Aqeel Malik saheb sey dertey dertey ham bhi ek jump laganey ki koshish kertey hein aur ek haiko ya shayad kuch aur cheez phainktey hein.........bey daregh raaey di jiye ga........ Taj Mahal (Suman Shah sey ma'azrat ke sath... Jamna ke us par mer mer ke bey jan badan mein jeeta jaagta piyar Qamar Aqeel saheb ye 5,7,waghera tow apni samajh sey baher hein. Jo hamen soojha keh diya hey...ab ager ye haiko nahene hey tow japaniyon ki aisi tesi.......
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Post by Atif Mirza on Jan 18, 2008 17:44:47 GMT 5
Wah Qamar Sahib Khush kia aap nay JapanioN ki aisi taisi kar kay. Haiko achhi hai, Daad hazir hai.
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Post by khalid on Jan 18, 2008 22:56:19 GMT 5
qamar sb meirey nazdeek to hyko ya sulaasi hi hai! lekin phir meiree raaey mustanad nahiN ho sakti!
ta'assur sey bherpoor hai bahar haal! daad haazir hai!!
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Jan 25, 2008 18:51:29 GMT 5
janab bahut umda waqaee hiko hay............magar japani nahi hay.......
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jan 25, 2008 22:42:33 GMT 5
wahhhhhh aik hyko meri janib say bhi
hamaray say jitna bhi chahay rang lay lo hamari aankh say chaho to raushni lay lo kisi tarah bhi ho tasweer to mukamal ho
yeh hyco say pehlay tu,araf kay waqt kaha tha Multan maiN Dr Ameen sahib ,Prof Anwar Jmal, Shafique Asif aur dosray ahbab ki maujoodgi maiN Dr Muhammad Ameen sahib nay hyco ka tu,araf karwaya to filbadeeh yeh hyco unhaiN sunaya tha
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zaamin
ibtidaai rukn
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Post by zaamin on Jan 26, 2008 7:07:01 GMT 5
Jamna ke us par mer mer ke bey jan badan mein jeeta jaagta piyar
mehfil-e-sukhan men is ke baare men discussion huwii thii ki haiku ke teen misre hot ehain pehla aur teesra 5 long syllables aur doosra saat par. is ke rukn yoon hote hain
faalun-faaulun-faa[ya faal] faalun-faalun-faalun-faa/faal faalun-faalun-faa/faal
is lihaaz se aapki nezm haiku nahin hogi;yoon haiku hoga
jamnaa ke us paar marmar kaa bejaan badan jeeta jis men pyaar
zaamin
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