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Post by ramishjaan on Aug 1, 2008 23:21:36 GMT 5
AOA SAEED bhai bohat umda seedhi ankho ke raste dil me utarti chali gai yeh Ghazal meri janib se bohat sari dad ap ki is ghazal ke liye chota monh badi bat aik mashwara gar tabiyat par gra.n na guzre to
Reh reh ke usey dekhna acha naheN lekin Her naqsh ko aankhoN meiN uter jaaney ki zidd hai mera adna sa mashwra yehi he ke Naqoosh ki yeh Zid maan li jiye kitni Masoom aur meethi Zid he Qalbe chaman se Dad ke phool ap ke liye waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Aug 2, 2008 12:02:12 GMT 5
ager aap image main paste karian tu main ghor say perhoon ga.roman main likhi hu shairy ho ya photo copy mera zooq perhnay ki ijazat naheen dayta.shairy latafat hay mushaqat naheen.
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Post by saeed on Aug 2, 2008 14:34:04 GMT 5
AOA SAEED bhai bohat umda seedhi ankho ke raste dil me utarti chali gai yeh Ghazal meri janib se bohat sari dad ap ki is ghazal ke liye chota monh badi bat aik mashwara gar tabiyat par gra.n na guzre to
Reh reh ke usey dekhna acha naheN lekin Her naqsh ko aankhoN meiN uter jaaney ki zidd hai mera adna sa mashwra yehi he ke Naqoosh ki yeh Zid maan li jiye kitni Masoom aur meethi Zid he Qalbe chaman se Dad ke phool ap ke liye waslam mukhlis ramishjaan Ramish bhai, Buhut nawazish pazeerayi keliye. Aapka mashwara bilkul baja hai....ham ne naqoosh ki zidd maan li... khush rahen saeed
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Post by saeed on Aug 2, 2008 14:35:35 GMT 5
ager aap image main paste karian tu main ghor say perhoon ga.roman main likhi hu shairy ho ya photo copy mera zooq perhnay ki ijazat naheen dayta.shairy latafat hay mushaqat naheen. Suhai saheb yeh lejiye.....
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Aug 2, 2008 17:52:59 GMT 5
saeed sahib mujay sirf yeh khusi hay keh aap kay kalam main rawani hay.rawani woh naheen jo log aam toor per istaymaal kertay hain.yeh aik technical istalah hay.main nain apni thesis ka dosra chapter jo funiistalahat say mutaliq hay atif mirza sahib ko email kia tha ager unhain kabi fursat huii tu iss forum per post ker dain gay.uss main in istalahat ki funi tareef hay.phD maqalay ka unwaan tha "urdu shairy main islah e sukhan ki rawayat"lahore say mujlis taraqi adab say shaya hua hay.maray pasandida field hay "tufheemi tunqeed" yeh istalah meri ghari huii hay.iss silsilay main meri aik kitab bhi hay"Baag o bahar by meer aman ka lisani tujzeea" multan say becon books nay shaya ki hay.yeh to theen fazool batain.ab aap ki ghazal per baat ho jaey. "reh reh kay daikhna" wala sher bohat umda hay iss kyaal say wohi poray toor per lutf undooz ho saktay hainn jo abroad rehtay hain. baqi kaii sher kasnay walay hain. pehlay sher main "phir" say lag raha hay keh josh e musafat pehlay bhii tha.jub keh deewangi tu musalsal cheez hay. do teen sher asay hain keh amoomi kyal hay.aap achay kyal la saktay hain juldbazi na kia karain.russian liguistic school of thougt kehta hay keh "text" ko "defamiliar" hona chaeay.aap naey kyal laya kareen.meer anees aik aik bund ki riyazat iss tarah kerwatay thay keh aik bund per 70 bund likhwatay thay.yeh hay reyazat jub aap itni riyazat karain gay tu kaii suhail abbas aap ko dad daynay kay liey line main kharay hoon gay.
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Post by saeed on Aug 4, 2008 8:38:33 GMT 5
saeed sahib mujay sirf yeh khusi hay keh aap kay kalam main rawani hay.rawani woh naheen jo log aam toor per istaymaal kertay hain.yeh aik technical istalah hay.main nain apni thesis ka dosra chapter jo funiistalahat say mutaliq hay atif mirza sahib ko email kia tha ager unhain kabi fursat huii tu iss forum per post ker dain gay.uss main in istalahat ki funi tareef hay.phD maqalay ka unwaan tha "urdu shairy main islah e sukhan ki rawayat"lahore say mujlis taraqi adab say shaya hua hay.maray pasandida field hay "tufheemi tunqeed" yeh istalah meri ghari huii hay.iss silsilay main meri aik kitab bhi hay"Baag o bahar by meer aman ka lisani tujzeea" multan say becon books nay shaya ki hay.yeh to theen fazool batain.ab aap ki ghazal per baat ho jaey. "reh reh kay daikhna" wala sher bohat umda hay iss kyaal say wohi poray toor per lutf undooz ho saktay hainn jo abroad rehtay hain. baqi kaii sher kasnay walay hain. pehlay sher main "phir" say lag raha hay keh josh e musafat pehlay bhii tha.jub keh deewangi tu musalsal cheez hay. do teen sher asay hain keh amoomi kyal hay.aap achay kyal la saktay hain juldbazi na kia karain.russian liguistic school of thougt kehta hay keh "text" ko "defamiliar" hona chaeay.aap naey kyal laya kareen.meer anees aik aik bund ki riyazat iss tarah kerwatay thay keh aik bund per 70 bund likhwatay thay.yeh hay reyazat jub aap itni riyazat karain gay tu kaii suhail abbas aap ko dad daynay kay liey line main kharay hoon gay. Suhail saheb, Buhut nawazish ke aapney itni tawajo se meri ghazal ko paRha aur apnney qeemati raye se nawaza. Jahan tak kasney ki bat hai to baja farmaya aapney…. Yes is ghazal ka pehla graft hai jo dostoN se share kiya hai. Publish honey ki manzil tak kasney ka amal jari rahega aur is ghazal ke kei ashaar mein tabdeliyaN aayengi aur shayad kuch ashaar qurban ho jayeN. “Phir Josh-e-musafat” ke silsiley mein arz hai ke josh aik sa nahen rehta is mein kami beshi aati rehti hai….jesey deevangi bhi musalsal honey ke ba-wajood kam ziyadeh hoti rehti hai. Riyazat ke barey mein aapka mashwara sar-aaonkhoN pe….ye kabhi na khatm honey wala safar hai. Aik bar phir mashwarey aur hosla afzai ka buhut shukriya. Regards, Saeed
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zaki
sukhanshanas
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Post by zaki on Sept 22, 2008 14:17:59 GMT 5
Bahut Khoobsorat Ghazal........ bahut sari daad qabool farmaeay...... Sada khush raheay....
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zehrab
rukn
ham pe guzrey hain khizaN ke sadmey--Ham sey poochey koi afsaana-e gul
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 12:10:42 GMT 5
Saeed Saheb
Aaj pehli baar aap ka kalam parha aur parhta hi chala gya
afsos hua ke kyun mein itna arsa aisey kalam sey mehroom raha
Noshi ka kehna sahi hay...waqaee Faraz aur Faiz ki khushbu aati hay aap ke kalam sey
aur Noshi ney naheen kaha magar khud Noshi Gailani ke kayee ashaar bhi yaad aa gaey aap ki shaeri parh ker........
ek bohat achi ghazal ke liye meri janib sey bhi ye haqeer si daad qabool ki jiye
Khaksar
Qamar
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