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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Aug 2, 2008 11:59:00 GMT 5
ager mushairoon ya amoomi shairy jo ho rahi kay lehaz say daikhain tu achi nazm hay.janay main ya unjanay main aap nay kaii mahawray banday hain jin say nazm ki zaban achi ho gaii hay.aik miray dheela hay aata jata her mosam kerta hay teri batain sursi chand,doha chand or mutaqarib ka milap hain.ager koii baqaida iltazam hota tu lajab nazm hoti.neez sifati tukroon ka bhii izafa chahey.yeh main iss liey keh raha hoon ki mujaj bari shairy pasand hay.yeh nazm acha hi ager aap kosish karain tu bari bhii ho sakti hay.
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Aug 2, 2008 12:36:43 GMT 5
wassay rani agar mehboob ka istaara hay tu yuhan "naar" ka lafz munasib hay.kunkeh naar alhar dosheeza or aag donoo manoon main istamaal hota hay.neez naar yani aag ka sehra say bhi khass taelq hay.n.m,rashid ki nazm{dil meray sahra nawerd e peer dil)main rashid nay aag kay istaerati undaaz ko khoob istamaaal kia hay.
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Post by saeed on Aug 2, 2008 14:37:22 GMT 5
[size=4]AOA Saeed bhai bohat khobsorat mahakti hoi nazm qalb e chaman se dad ke bohat se phool ap ke husne klam ki nazr waslam Mukhlis ramishjaan [/size][/color][/quote] Buhut nawazish Ramish bhai. Saeed
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Post by saeed on Aug 2, 2008 14:46:50 GMT 5
ager mushairoon ya amoomi shairy jo ho rahi kay lehaz say daikhain tu achi nazm hay.janay main ya unjanay main aap nay kaii mahawray banday hain jin say nazm ki zaban achi ho gaii hay.aik miray dheela hay aata jata her mosam kerta hay teri batain sursi chand,doha chand or mutaqarib ka milap hain.ager koii baqaida iltazam hota tu lajab nazm hoti.neez sifati tukroon ka bhii izafa chahey.yeh main iss liey keh raha hoon ki mujaj bari shairy pasand hay.yeh nazm acha hi ager aap kosish karain tu bari bhii ho sakti hay. Prof saheb Buhut nawazish ke aapney meri nazm ko pRha aur apni qeemti raye se nawaza. aapney jo points uthaye hain main zroor un pe ghaur karonga. mujehy dili khushi hui hai aapki masbat tanqueed paRh ker! aayenda bhi apni raye se nawaztey rehye ga. mashkoor Saeed
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Post by saeed on Aug 2, 2008 15:11:18 GMT 5
wassay rani agar mehboob ka istaara hay tu yuhan "naar" ka lafz munasib hay.kunkeh naar alhar dosheeza or aag donoo manoon main istamaal hota hay.neez naar yani aag ka sehra say bhi khass taelq hay.n.m,rashid ki nazm{dil meray sahra nawerd e peer dil)main rashid nay aag kay istaerati undaaz ko khoob istamaaal kia hay. Suhail saheb, AaPKi bat baja hai ke sehra ke sath rani ke bajaye nar ziadeh munasib lagta.... lekin meine "Rohi" ke sath rani istemaal kiya hai. Rohi sehra mein woh jageh jahan zindagi mumkin ho...Yahan Rani mehboob ke ilawa zindagi ka iste-ara bhi hai. ...aur phir Rohi aur rani ka soti tassur bhi. regards, saeed
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Post by suhailabbaskhan on Aug 2, 2008 17:29:19 GMT 5
saeed sahib shukriya.
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Post by zaki on Sept 13, 2008 15:09:18 GMT 5
Bahut Khoob..... Daad qabool farmaeay......Sada khush raheay......
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Post by nadeem on Sept 17, 2008 2:45:38 GMT 5
salam guzar raha tha rohi ka zikr paRha to raha na gaya nazm ko smeta gaya hai jab keh rohi par likhi janay wali nazm itni choti nahen ho sakti baaz doston naen mashwaray diey to khoob say khoob tar ki gunjaish to har insan kay fanpaaray maen hoti hai mujhay is nazm ka aahang acha laga saeed bhai meri bhi aik taweel nazm hai meray dosray majmooaey maen ROHI PEER FAREED KI us ka aik band aap ki nazr
rhoi ki sunsaan shaboon maen apnay aap ko kho diya jism khajooron ki shakhoon pay doka doka piro diya dekh kay haal hamara rait ka zara zara ro diya gandum kay khetoon maen Maula jangli jaee ko bo diya
pholon ki khahish maen ham naen kitnay kantay pa liey kantay jo pairoon maen chubhay thay aaj saroon tak aa liey zehr ragoon maen phail raha hai aap hi aa kay nikaliey meethay bair samajh kar ham naen kaRway tummay kha liey
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Post by jooni on Oct 9, 2008 3:04:39 GMT 5
Saeed Sahib, Boht khoobsoorat andaaz main aap ne Rohi ki Rani ko paish kia hai. Dhair sari daad hazir hai. Kbhi hamaray "THALL" kay Raja ka bhi zikr ho ja'ay.
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Nov 26, 2008 18:57:45 GMT 5
Saeed sahab bahut arasy baad ana hoa aur ap ki ye lehreay layti hoe nazm bahut bhali lagi kiun is mein geet ki see kaifiat samny ati hay aik jaga par nazr e sani chaheay Rang ko ap nay jis tarha bandha hay asataza kay haN aisi bandish nahi hay maloom nahi ap say ye ghalati kaysay sarzad hogaey..........nazr e sani chaheay..........
aqeel
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