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Post by Sukhanwar on Sept 20, 2008 23:44:19 GMT 5
bicharrna hy , dilasa day rahay hain hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain
mubarak baad dayna chaahtay thay magar logon ko pursa day rahay hain
humain rastay main hi rehna parray ga keh hum logon ko rasta day rahay hain
hamara kul asaasa aik dill tha tujhay us ka bhi qabza day rahay hain
rahay chaahat salamat ta qyaamat bicharr kar is ka sadqa day rahay hain
yeh kaysa khaab hy ahbaab mayray meray maathay pay bosa day rahay hain
yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain
razi ud din razi
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Post by ramishjaan on Sept 21, 2008 0:29:31 GMT 5
bicharrna hy , dilasa day rahay hain hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain
wah keya umda kehyal peesh kiya he janab
mubarak baad dayna chaahtay thay magar logon ko pursa day rahay hain
bohat umda ap ka yeh sher parhte hi islamabad ke halat nazro me ghom ge jaha mubarik bade peesh ki ja rahi thi aor chand lamho me halat ne esi karwat badli ki log aik dosre pursa de rahe the
humain rastay main hi rehna parray ga keh hum logon ko rasta day rahay hain
pakistan ke majuda halat ki bhar por tarjumani karta howa sher
hamara kul asaasa aik dill tha tujhay us ka bhi qabza day rahay hain
bohat umda seedha dil me utar geya
rahay chaahat salamat ta qyaamat bicharr kar is ka sadqa day rahay hain
wah
yeh kaysa khaab hy ahbaab mayray meray maathay pay bosa day rahay hain
keya parwaz he kehyal ki razi bhai aik sard khouf ki lehr sare wajud me pheel gai ap ke is sher ko jab mulki pas manzar me dekha to
yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain
ab keya kaho ke Razi bhai aj ap ki is tehreer bohat rolya ap ki sari ghazal mujhe aj ke halat ke pas manzar me dikhei di aur aik paksitani ki itni dardnak soch ne mere dil ko dehla diya bohat sari dad qabol ki jiye s huane klam par waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by Sukhanwar on Sept 21, 2008 10:51:54 GMT 5
bicharrna hy , dilasa day rahay hain hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain wah keya umda kehyal peesh kiya he janab
mubarak baad dayna chaahtay thay magar logon ko pursa day rahay hain bohat umda ap ka yeh sher parhte hi islamabad ke halat nazro me ghom ge jaha mubarik bade peesh ki ja rahi thi aor chand lamho me halat ne esi karwat badli ki log aik dosre pursa de rahe the humain rastay main hi rehna parray ga keh hum logon ko rasta day rahay hain pakistan ke majuda halat ki bhar por tarjumani karta howa sherhamara kul asaasa aik dill tha tujhay us ka bhi qabza day rahay hain bohat umda seedha dil me utar geya rahay chaahat salamat ta qyaamat bicharr kar is ka sadqa day rahay hain wahyeh kaysa khaab hy ahbaab mayray meray maathay pay bosa day rahay hain keya parwaz he kehyal ki razi bhai aik sard khouf ki lehr sare wajud me pheel gai ap ke is sher ko jab mulki pas manzar me dekha to yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain ab keya kaho ke Razi bhai aj ap ki is tehreer bohat rolya ap ki sari ghazal mujhe aj ke halat ke pas manzar me dikhei di aur aik paksitani ki itni dardnak soch ne mere dil ko dehla diya bohat sari dad qabol ki jiye s huane klam par waslam mukhlis ramishjaanramish bhai boht shukria is pazeeraai ka aap ny jis muhabat sy her shair par daad dee us k liay main aap ka mamnon hoon aap nay drust kaha k aaj kul jo halaat ja rahay hain yeh ghazal isi ki akaasi karti hy thanx razi
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Sept 22, 2008 19:12:49 GMT 5
wahhhhh bohat khoob Razi bhai
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Post by Sukhanwar on Sept 22, 2008 23:10:13 GMT 5
wahhhhh bohat khoob Razi bhai shukria rafi bhai razi
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Post by zaki on Sept 23, 2008 9:24:31 GMT 5
Razi bhai........ Bahut khoobsoart ghazal ....... bahut sari daad app k naam..... Sada khush raheay....
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Post by Sukhanwar on Sept 25, 2008 0:49:47 GMT 5
Razi bhai........ Bahut khoobsoart ghazal ....... bahut sari daad app k naam..... Sada khush raheay.... shukria arshad sahab razi
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Post by zehrab on Sept 26, 2008 12:04:35 GMT 5
Razi Bhai
Wah wah
aap hamesha achootey radeef o qafia per likhtey hain
aam rah sey hat ker
bohat dilkash andaz hay aap ka
ltf aa gaya saheb................lekin ager gustakhi na samjhen tow ek arz hay:
is sher mein:
yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain
misra-e sani mein "jhonka dey rahey hain" per nazr-e sani ki zaroorat hay meri naqis raaey mein
Jhonka aata hay...diya naheen jaata....dhakka diya jata hay........kam az kam mere ilm mein tow aisi koi misal naheeN hay........shayad aap behter jaantey hoN......
Ek bohat achi aur hasb-e haal ghazal ke liye bohat si daad
Khaksar
Qamar
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Post by Sukhanwar on Sept 27, 2008 0:38:47 GMT 5
Razi Bhai Wah wah aap hamesha achootey radeef o qafia per likhtey hain aam rah sey hat ker bohat dilkash andaz hay aap ka ltf aa gaya saheb................lekin ager gustakhi na samjhen tow ek arz hay: is sher mein: yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain misra-e sani mein "jhonka dey rahey hain" per nazr-e sani ki zaroorat hay meri naqis raaey mein Jhonka aata hay...diya naheen jaata....dhakka diya jata hay........kam az kam mere ilm mein tow aisi koi misal naheeN hay........shayad aap behter jaantey hoN...... Ek bohat achi aur hasb-e haal ghazal ke liye bohat si daad Khaksar Qamar qamar bhai aap ka shukria k aap ny ghazal ko pasand kia aap ny jis shair ki janib ishara kia hy us hawalay sy mayri raay yeh hy k shair ko lafzon ko un k murawija istamal sy hut kar baratna chaahiay lafzon ko un k mamool k maani k saath yah mamool l andaz main to sabhi istamaal kar rahay hain shair ko apna diction banana chaahiay aur isi soorat bun sakta hy jub woh raaij ul waqt zaabton sy hut kar baat karta hay agar shair waazeh mafhoom day raha hy aur is k nateejay main koi barra uljhaao payda nahin hua to mayra khyaal hy yeh istamaal drust hay main aap ki raay ka ehtraam karta hoon mujhy khushi hui k aap nay mayri ghazal ka bghor mutala kia thanx razi
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Post by Tanweer on Sept 27, 2008 2:28:00 GMT 5
bicharrna hy , dilasa day rahay hain hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain mubarak baad dayna chaahtay thay magar logon ko pursa day rahay hain humain rastay main hi rehna parray ga keh hum logon ko rasta day rahay hain hamara kul asaasa aik dill tha tujhay us ka bhi qabza day rahay hain rahay chaahat salamat ta qyaamat bicharr kar is ka sadqa day rahay hain yeh kaysa khaab hy ahbaab mayray meray maathay pay bosa day rahay hain yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain razi ud din razi Razi saheb, bohat he omdaah, aik bar^jasta ghazal aapki, jitni bhi daad di jaey kam hay, alfaaz nahi mil rahay tareef k liey. bay^shumar daad hazir hay. Tanweer
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Post by Aqeel Malik on Sept 28, 2008 11:45:00 GMT 5
Razi sahab
ghazal ka matalia kia bahut acha laga jahan tak jhonka daynay ka qazia hay tu aik baat ye bhi zehn mein rakhna zaroori hota hay ke talazmaati nizam meiN ap agar koe concreet fact bana rahay hein tu us sorat mein aisa lafz ko concreet na ho tu us soorat mein masadir kay ulat phiar say aisa kar lia jata hay aur yaqeenan Iqbaal zafar ki aik bahut bari misaal hamaray samnay hay lihaza ap ka muravija lafz apnay poray mana talazmaati nizaam samiat dayraha hay is leay us ko badalnay ki zaroorat nahi hay as it is darust hay han ye alaag baaat ke ap koe khud say mazeed acha lana chahein tu ye aik alag sorat hay
aqeel
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Post by Sukhanwar on Oct 2, 2008 8:25:36 GMT 5
bicharrna hy , dilasa day rahay hain hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain mubarak baad dayna chaahtay thay magar logon ko pursa day rahay hain humain rastay main hi rehna parray ga keh hum logon ko rasta day rahay hain hamara kul asaasa aik dill tha tujhay us ka bhi qabza day rahay hain rahay chaahat salamat ta qyaamat bicharr kar is ka sadqa day rahay hain yeh kaysa khaab hy ahbaab mayray meray maathay pay bosa day rahay hain yeh jeewan bujh nahin paaya kisi say hum ab khud is ko jhonka day rahay hain razi ud din razi Razi saheb, bohat he omdaah, aik bar^jasta ghazal aapki, jitni bhi daad di jaey kam hay, alfaaz nahi mil rahay tareef k liey. bay^shumar daad hazir hay. Tanweertanweer bhai boht muhabat aap ki thanx razi
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Post by jooni on Oct 9, 2008 2:10:09 GMT 5
Razi Bhaii, Boht hi umdah, Boht khoobsoorat. Matla'a kia khoob hai;
"Bichharna hai, dilasa day rahay hain Hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain"
Daad qubool ho.
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Post by Sukhanwar on Oct 10, 2008 23:48:36 GMT 5
Razi Bhaii, Boht hi umdah, Boht khoobsoorat. Matla'a kia khoob hai; "Bichharna hai, dilasa day rahay hain Hum ik doojay ko dhoka day rahay hain" Daad qubool ho. boht shukria aap ka razi
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Post by neha on Oct 11, 2008 14:30:18 GMT 5
Bohut khoob Razi bhai, Aaj jesay hi sukhanwar par log in hui tou sab se pehlay aap ki ghazal par nazar padhi. aur padh k bohut maza aya ...tamam hi ash'aar acchay lagay...meri taraf se daad hazir-e-khidmat hai
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