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Post by kanwal on Feb 29, 2008 3:44:17 GMT 5
Dar band ho chuke haiN mohabbat ke baab ke Hum muntazir haiN aaj bhi tere jawab ke Manzil na ban sake ga wo hum ko thi ye khabr Dil bhaagta tha kyuN bhala peeche saraab ke MadhoshiyoN meiN lutt gaye haiN ghar kayee yahaN Warna to hum nahiN haiN mukhaalif sharaab ke Jab se parhe haiN chehre usi pal se hum pe ab Roshan hue haiN baab kayee ab nisaab ke Humne wohi kiya hai, kiya tha jo aap ne ,.... KyuN hosh ur rahe haiN bhala ab janaab ke ,..... Boya tha aap ne jo wohi kaatiye hazoor "Din aa gaye qareeb ab roz e hisaab ke" To aisi baat kar E kaNwal, jiss se yuN lage Jharne lage haiN phool laboN se gulaab ke
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Post by zaamin on Feb 29, 2008 4:53:47 GMT 5
bahut khoobsoorat ghazal kahii hai,kanwal ji;dekh rahaa hoon,ki ab aap ko behr pe uboor hota jaa rahaa hai;aap ki lagan aur mehnat ke liye aap ko mubaarakbaad pesh karta hoon. Dar band ho chuke haiN mohabbat ke baab ke Hum muntazir haiN aaj bhi tere jawab ke bahut khoob matla'a kahaa haiManzil na ban sake ga wo hum ko thi ye khabr Dil bhaagta tha kyuN bhala peeche saraab ke achchaa sher hai.MadhoshiyoN meiN lutt gaye haiN ghar kayee yahaN Warna to hum nahiN haiN mukhaalif sharaab ke khoob kahaa. Jab se parhe haiN chehre usi pal se hum pe ab Roshan hue haiN baab kayee ab nisaab ke behr theek hai;lekin sher behtar ho sakta hai;ab ki takraar bhii khatak rahii hai.Humne wohi kiya hai, kiya tha jo aap ne ,.... KyuN hosh ur rahe haiN bhala ab janaab ke ,..... khoobBoya tha aap ne jo wohi kaatiye hazoor "Din aa gaye qareeb ab roz e hisaab ke" khoob tarah baandhaa haiTo aisi baat kar E kaNwal, jiss se yuN lage Jharne lage haiN phool lab se gulaab ke aakhiri misra behr men nahiin hai.jharne lage hoN phool yooN lab se gulaab kedaad qabool farmaayen zaamin
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Post by Sukhanwar on Feb 29, 2008 7:54:06 GMT 5
kanwal khoob ghazal kahi hy tum ny her shair umda hay jis shair par zaamin sahib ny aytraz kia us main mera khyal hy aik lafz ki typing mistake ho gaai yooonhi mehnat jari rakho thanx razi
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Post by shahkaar on Feb 29, 2008 19:22:51 GMT 5
kanwal saheba
buhut acchi ghazal kahi.pasand ayee.sheroon ke khayaalaat pasand ayee.daad qubool kejay.
shahkaar
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Feb 29, 2008 23:37:28 GMT 5
wahh
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Post by kanwal on Mar 1, 2008 1:13:16 GMT 5
bahut khoobsoorat ghazal kahii hai,kanwal ji;dekh rahaa hoon,ki ab aap ko behr pe uboor hota jaa rahaa hai;aap ki lagan aur mehnat ke liye aap ko mubaarakbaad pesh karta hoon. Dar band ho chuke haiN mohabbat ke baab ke Hum muntazir haiN aaj bhi tere jawab ke bahut khoob matla'a kahaa haiManzil na ban sake ga wo hum ko thi ye khabr Dil bhaagta tha kyuN bhala peeche saraab ke achchaa sher hai.MadhoshiyoN meiN lutt gaye haiN ghar kayee yahaN Warna to hum nahiN haiN mukhaalif sharaab ke khoob kahaa. Jab se parhe haiN chehre usi pal se hum pe ab Roshan hue haiN baab kayee ab nisaab ke behr theek hai;lekin sher behtar ho sakta hai;ab ki takraar bhii khatak rahii hai.Humne wohi kiya hai, kiya tha jo aap ne ,.... KyuN hosh ur rahe haiN bhala ab janaab ke ,..... khoobBoya tha aap ne jo wohi kaatiye hazoor "Din aa gaye qareeb ab roz e hisaab ke" khoob tarah baandhaa haiTo aisi baat kar E kaNwal, jiss se yuN lage Jharne lage haiN phool lab se gulaab ke aakhiri misra behr men nahiin hai.jharne lage hoN phool yooN lab se gulaab kedaad qabool farmaayen zaamin Zaamin jee ,... Bohat shukriya aur bohat acha laga ke aapne meri hausla afzaayee ki, aur apne umdaa aur mufeed mashwaroN se nawaaza,... Aap ne kaha ke: to Zaamin jee main to thora thora samjhi hooN bas yeh wo samandar hai jis meiN jitnaa dooba jaaye utnii gehraayee milti haiN, aur meri khahish hai ke main isski teh talak jaoN aur yeh sab aur sab be shak meri mehnat aur lagan se hua, aur hoga par iss meiN sab se eham haiN unn ki duaeiN haiN jo khaloos e diL se har pal mujhe nawaazte rehte haiN, aur phir Sukhanwar ki shafeeQ hastiyaN jo pathroN ko taraashne ka hunar jaanti haiN, kis pather meiN kaunsi chamak posheeda hai khoob bhaanp leti haiN,.... Last misra theek kar liya hai maine ,..... aur doosre pe nazr e saani INSHALLAH zaroor karoongi ,... Thank you so much ,.....
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Post by kanwal on Mar 1, 2008 1:15:56 GMT 5
kanwal khoob ghazal kahi hy tum ny her shair umda hay jis shair par zaamin sahib ny aytraz kia us main mera khyal hy aik lafz ki typing mistake ho gaai yooonhi mehnat jari rakho thanx razi Thank you Razi jee ,.... Maine theek kar liya hai,... Aap ne sahi pehchaana,.... main uss waqt do se sharf e guftagoo bakhsh rahi thi,... afsaana ready kar rahi thi aur photoshop aur INPAGE khole baithi thi ,... nateeja ,...
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Post by Tanweer on Mar 1, 2008 11:25:59 GMT 5
Kanwal Beti!
Aik omdaah ghazal par meri janib say bohat ziyadi wali daad.
tomhara uncle
Tanweer
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Post by ramishjaan on Mar 3, 2008 1:36:45 GMT 5
AOA azeez kanwal jee ap ki khobsorat ghazal suni parhi dekhi ... me smajhta hon is ghazal par rafi shaib k abe sakhta wah our razi sahib ki qeemti raye is bat ka saboot he ke ap ke andar ki shaira ab seekhne ke marhal se guzarte howe kamyabi ki manzil ke qareeb pohanch gai he .......................................[/size]
bohat hi Aala matla yani mohabat ki asal intha yehi he ke jis dar par insan aik dafa sada laga de hamesha wahi se jawab ka muntazir rahe dunyawi gadagro ki tarha dar badalta na rahe umda sher
dil to pagal he na jee hamesha sarab ke piche hi bhagta he [/b]
yeh sher ap ki wase nazri ka sabot he ke ap ka musheda sirf apni zaat tak mehdod nahi balke waseetar he
bohat acha sher lateef jazbat liye howe
be sakhta muskra diye the jab yeh ishaar sune the ap ki zubani our taswar hi taswar me kahin se kahin pohanch ge the [/size]
bohat umda ALLHA kare maqte me mangi hoi duaa hamesha ap ke haq me pori hoti rahe ameen suma ameen kanwam jee bohat sari dad ap ke is khobsorat klam ki nazr waslam ramishjaan
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Post by kanwal on Mar 14, 2008 2:49:18 GMT 5
aap ne theek kaha Razi bhai kanwal ne jab likhi thi to uss mein mistake nahin thi bas post karne mein ho gayi hogi, issi liye maine bhi mushaira vaale thread mein kuch nahin kaha.ek saath kitne kaam karti ho issi liye aisa hua hai kanwal, anyway ek baar phir se daad haazir hai tumhaari is kaamyaab ghazal par. thank you meri achi si didi ,....
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Post by kanwal on Mar 14, 2008 2:50:03 GMT 5
kanwal saheba buhut acchi ghazal kahi.pasand ayee.sheroon ke khayaalaat pasand ayee.daad qubool kejay. shahkaar Thank you shahkaar jee ,.... Aapki daad humare dil ke gulshan meiN mehakti rahe gi ,...
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Post by Atif Mirza on Apr 8, 2008 1:02:10 GMT 5
WAhhhhh kia umda ghazal hai!!! Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaad!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Iss sher maiN chhoti ghalati hai, Durustgi bhi tajweez kar raha hooN:-
Manzil na ban sake ga wo hum ko thi ye khabr Manzil na ban sakay ga woh hum ko to thi khabar Dil bhaagta tha kyuN bhala peeche saraab ke
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Post by kanwal on May 25, 2008 2:24:35 GMT 5
thank you ,....
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Post by kanwal on May 25, 2008 2:25:45 GMT 5
Kanwal Beti! Aik omdaah ghazal par meri janib say bohat ziyadi wali daad. tomhara uncle TanweerThank you my dearest Uncle,...
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