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gazal ,
Jun 11, 2008 12:59:33 GMT 5
Post by dilshad on Jun 11, 2008 12:59:33 GMT 5
salam _o_alaekum ,
gazal pesh hai , aap ki aaraa ka muntazir hoon ,
dilshadnazmi
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha
mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha
main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin
dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par
mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n
kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha [/color][/color][/b][/quote] Dilshad Nazmi Saheb, Achi kavish hai....aur zameen bhi buhut khubsurat hai ...classical touch ke saath. Mujhey ye ghazal (behr aur qafia) paRhker Jalib ki yeh mash-hoor ghazal yaad aayi: "Sar-e-member woh khwabooN ke mahal ta-meer kartey hain" Acha lagta hai jab kisi naye likhney waley ke kalam se kisi senior ke yaad taza ho. radeef thoRi tang aur kafi mushkil hai isliye baaz ashaar pe abhi nazr-e-sani ki zroorat hai. Is misrey ko dekh lijyega "main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha " lafz chataan hai Chat-taan nahen. Mujhey ghazal ka matla buhut acha laga.. moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha Daad hazir hai. Saeed [/quote] saeed sahib , salam _o-alaekum ,, aap ne janab shakeeb jalib ka misra ata kar ke mere ilm me izafa kiya " shukriya " lafz chat_tan ke mutal_liq main loghat me dekhoonga , hanlakey kai eak jagho'n pe mein ne logo'n ko issi tarah pad<htey aur kahtey dekha hai , shayed ke galatul awaam ki shakl me mujhe se wzaa ho gaya , lafz chat_taan .... bahr haal yeh lafz mujh se tahqeeq chahta hai , jo main karoonga . aap ka be had shukriya , gazal ki pazeerai ke liye aur meri hosla afzai ke liye mazeed shukriya mukhlis , dilshadnazmi
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gazal ,
Jun 11, 2008 13:46:51 GMT 5
Post by saeedsaeed on Jun 11, 2008 13:46:51 GMT 5
AOA DILSHAD SHAB MAZZA AA GYA AP KI GHAZAL PARH KAY WAH JEE AKHHER HY MUNFIRED LEHJA AUR LAFFAZI AUR KHEYALAT HAIN AP KI DAADD HAZER HY KHAS TOOR PY YE ASHAR TO WAHHHH
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha
main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei
hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin
dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
OK TAKE CARE Mubashir
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gazal ,
Jun 11, 2008 16:13:35 GMT 5
Post by nadeem on Jun 11, 2008 16:13:35 GMT 5
muhtram Dilshad as Salam u alikum meri jo raey thi wo maen naen aap ki khidmat maen arz kar di ab aap ka us say mutafiq hona zaorori nahen aap naen chaT_Taan bandha to yeh lafz chatan hai isay daikh lejiey ga jo us din baar baar light janay ki waja say tehreer say missing ho gaya shayad yehi waja hai kay meri post do baar hoi bahar haal final wohi hai jo aap chah rahay haen agar aap apnay jawaab ko ghaur say parhaen to us maen aap ko nazar aaey ga keh jo maen keh raha hoon aik tarha say aap us ki taeed kar rahay haen bas zara ghaur farmaen gay to baat khulay gi Allah Saeen aap ko khush rakhay
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gazal ,
Jun 12, 2008 17:47:37 GMT 5
Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 12, 2008 17:47:37 GMT 5
Nazmi Sahib! Aap ka hukm sar aaNkhoN per. Lijiay Urdu maiN aap ki ghazal hazir hai.
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gazal ,
Jun 12, 2008 18:51:09 GMT 5
Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 12, 2008 18:51:09 GMT 5
Nazmi Sahib Saeed Sahib Theek kehtay haiN lafz Cha-tan hai. MaiN nay "Jame' Feroz-ul-Lughaat" maiN daikha hai. Yeh lafz Zaban Hindi-Urdu ka hai aur Moannas, Ism hai.
Aap sher maiN durustgi kijiay maiN aap ki ghazal ka Urdu Image badal dooN ga.
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gazal ,
Jun 14, 2008 12:45:52 GMT 5
Post by dnangrani on Jun 14, 2008 12:45:52 GMT 5
Dishaad ji is khoobsoorat gazal ke liye aapko jitni daad doon vo kam hai
shabdon ka silsila kam padta hai isliye ssneh Devi Nangrani
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gazal ,
Jun 15, 2008 10:09:48 GMT 5
Post by Aqeel Malik on Jun 15, 2008 10:09:48 GMT 5
bari khoobsorat ahang ki ghazal hay achi lagi
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gazal ,
Jun 17, 2008 16:41:11 GMT 5
Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 17, 2008 16:41:11 GMT 5
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