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Post by dilshad on Jun 4, 2008 21:36:52 GMT 5
salam _o_alaekum ,
gazal pesh hai , aap ki aaraa ka muntazir hoon ,
dilshadnazmi
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha
mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha
main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin
dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par
mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n
kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha [/color][/color][/b]
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Post by Atif Mirza on Jun 4, 2008 23:06:34 GMT 5
Wah kia shusta kalaam ataa kia hai Nazmi Sahib aap nay. Poori ghazal hi qabil-e-daad hai, aik aik sher napa tula aur moassar. Maani aur mazaameen kay e'tibaar say bahut khoob soorat ghazal hai yeh. Meri jaanib say bay hisaab daad aap ki nazr.
Mandarja zail sher tau hasb-e-haal hai, iss per khasoosi daad: -
Falak bosi dhamakoN say huwi thee sarnagooN, lekin DhuwaaN Bagdad, Kabul, Waadi-e-Kashmir tak pahoncha
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Post by Rafi Tabasum on Jun 4, 2008 23:36:56 GMT 5
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha
mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha
main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n
kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha
Khoobsoorat ghazal Dilshad sahib sabhi ash,aar khoobsoorat daad qabool farmaiN
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Post by kanwal on Jun 5, 2008 0:27:19 GMT 5
dilshaad jee bohat hi dilshaad si ghazl kahi aapne jis ke liye dil ke gulshan se Daad e guL aapki nazR ,...
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Post by ramishjaan on Jun 7, 2008 0:44:55 GMT 5
AOA mohtram dilshad sahib bohat umda khobsorat aur lab o lehje ke hawale se inthei shandar ghazal atta ki he ap ne bohat sari dad qabol ki jyie waslam mukhlis ramishjaan
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Post by dilshad on Jun 9, 2008 22:26:59 GMT 5
Wah kia shusta kalaam ataa kia hai Nazmi Sahib aap nay. Poori ghazal hi qabil-e-daad hai, aik aik sher napa tula aur moassar. Maani aur mazaameen kay e'tibaar say bahut khoob soorat ghazal hai yeh. Meri jaanib say bay hisaab daad aap ki nazr.
Mandarja zail sher tau hasb-e-haal hai, iss per khasoosi daad: -
Falak bosi dhamakoN say huwi thee sarnagooN, lekin DhuwaaN Bagdad, Kabul, Waadi-e-Kashmir tak pahonchabhai atif , salam _O_alaekum , aap ki purkhloos daad pa kar mujhey bahot khushi huwi , main koshish karta hoon ke issi ahang pe hamesha kahney ki sa_eei karta raho . mujhey yeh jaan kar khushi huwi ke mere lahejey ne aap ko mutasir kiya , duwao'n ka talib hoon , dilshadnazmi
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Post by dilshad on Jun 9, 2008 22:29:49 GMT 5
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha Khoobsoorat ghazal Dilshad sahib sabhi ash,aar khoobsoorat daad qabool farmaiN rafi sahib , salam _o_alaekum , aap ki duwao'n ka saya mujh kam ilm par yo'n hi barqarar rahe . gazal ki pasandeedgi ka be had shukriya . mukhlis dilshadnazmi
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Post by dilshad on Jun 9, 2008 22:31:55 GMT 5
dilshaad jee bohat hi dilshaad si ghazl kahi aapne jis ke liye dil ke gulshan se Daad e guL aapki nazR ,... kanwal ji , salam _o_alaekum , aap hamesha mujhey apni duwao'n se nawazti hain , iss gazal aap ki tawaj_ja pa kar mujhey bahot khushi huwi , duwao'n me yaad rakhein , mukhlis dilshadnazmi
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Post by dilshad on Jun 9, 2008 22:34:35 GMT 5
AOA mohtram dilshad sahib bohat umda khobsorat aur lab o lehje ke hawale se inthei shandar ghazal atta ki he ap ne bohat sari dad qabol ki jyie waslam mukhlis ramishjaan ;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;; ramish bhai salam _o_alaekum ,
aap ki mahab_bato'n bhari daad pa kar mujhey ach_cha laga ,
duao'n ka talib hoon ,
dilshadnazmi
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Post by Sukhanwar on Jun 9, 2008 23:59:57 GMT 5
dilshad sahab boht khoobsoorat andaz hay munfarid zameen hay aur is main khoob ashaar taraashay hain aap nay
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par
mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
yeh shair boht munfrid hay poori ghazal aik khaas ahand tarteeb dayti hay aur is ki lafziaat bhi munfarid hain aap ka andaz boht mukhtalif nazar aa raha hay daad qabool kijiay thanx razi
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Post by nadeem on Jun 10, 2008 2:56:35 GMT 5
Muhtram Dilshad Wa alikum us salam mujh par aik qarz tha wo yeh keh aap naen meri ghazal ka tafseeli mutala kiya tha aur tafseeli jawaab bhi ata kiya tha aaj aap ki ghazal paRhi to is ka aik aik lafz basar kiya jo aap ki khidmat maen arz kar raha hoon yeh kehtay howay mujhay khushi mehsoos ho rahi hai keh aap kay haan shairi mehz radeef qafiey ka naam nahen balkay aap bahut napay tulay misray kehtay haen aur shairi kay buniyadi qareenay say aap pori tarha waqif haen
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
acha matla hai
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
dosra misra aisay hota to meray hisaab say bahut acha hota maen ik chaT_Taan tha aur TooT kar taameer tak puhncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
is sher ka dosra misra agar aisay hota to bahut maza aata shutar ghurba ka shaiba na rehta hamaray paoon khud hi halqa e zanjeer tak puhnchay lekin radeef ki majboori hai is liey aap naen isay aisay kaha achi ghazal maen yeh sher acha nahen lag raha baqi aap behtar samajhtay haen
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
is sher maen jugrafiya to hai lekin sheriyat kam nazar aa rahi hai aur abhaam bhi bahut mehsoos ho raha hai ho sakta hai yeh meri kam ilami ho aap is ki wazahat karaen gay to kuch pata chal sakta hai keh aap kiya kehna chah rahay haen
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
bahut acha sher hai
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha
yahan bhi radeef naen aik achay sher ko kha liya hai agar aisay hota to bahut acha hota
kabhi khamoshiaan dilshad nazmi mujh maen dar aaen kabhi aawaz kay pathar meri tashh_heer tak puhnchaen
bahar haal aap ki ghazal parh kar lutf aaya aap kay jawaab ka muntazir rahoon ga takay meray ilm maen izafa ho sakay
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Post by nadeem on Jun 10, 2008 2:57:31 GMT 5
Muhtram Dilshad Wa alikum us salam mujh par aik qarz tha wo yeh keh aap naen meri ghazal ka tafseeli mutala kiya tha aur tafseeli jawaab bhi ata kiya tha aaj aap ki ghazal paRhi to is ka aik aik lafz basar kiya jo aap ki khidmat maen arz kar raha hoon yeh kehtay howay mujhay khushi mehsoos ho rahi hai keh aap kay haan shairi mehz radeef qafiey ka naam nahen balkay aap bahut napay tulay misray kehtay haen aur shairi kay buniyadi qareenay say aap pori tarha waqif haen
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
acha matla hai
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
dosra misra aisay hota to meray hisaab say bahut acha hota maen ik chaT_Taan tha aur TooT kar taameer tak puhncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
is sher ka dosra misra agar aisay hota to bahut maza aata shutar ghurba ka shaiba na rehta hamaray paoon khud hi halqa e zanjeer tak puhnchay lekin radeef ki majboori hai is liey aap naen isay aisay kaha achi ghazal maen yeh sher acha nahen lag raha baqi aap behtar samajhtay haen
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
is sher maen jugrafiya to hai lekin sheriyat kam nazar aa rahi hai aur abhaam bhi bahut mehsoos ho raha hai ho sakta hai yeh meri kam ilami ho aap is ki wazahat karaen gay to kuch pata chal sakta hai keh aap kiya kehna chah rahay haen
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
bahut acha sher hai
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha
yahan bhi radeef naen aik achay sher ko kha liya hai agar aisay hota to bahut acha hota
kabhi khamoshiaan dilshad nazmi mujh maen dar aaen kabhi aawaz kay pathar meri tashh_heer tak puhnchaen
bahar haal aap ki ghazal parh kar lutf aaya aap kay jawaab ka muntazir rahoon ga takay meray ilm maen izafa ho sakay
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gazal ,
Jun 10, 2008 16:35:41 GMT 5
Post by dilshad on Jun 10, 2008 16:35:41 GMT 5
[quote author=admin board=andazebayan thread=1102 post=9310 time=1213037997]dilshad sahab boht khoobsoorat andaz hay munfarid zameen hay aur is main khoob ashaar taraashay hain aap nay
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par
mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
yeh shair boht munfrid hay poori ghazal aik khaas ahand tarteeb dayti hay aur is ki lafziaat bhi munfarid hain aap ka andaz boht mukhtalif nazar aa raha hay daad qabool kijiay thanx razi[/quote][/font]
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razi sahib , salam _o_alaekum,
aap ne jin kalimaat se meri gazal ki tareef ki hai , aur usse sraha hai , yeh mere liye bahot ho'n'sla afza baat hai , mujhey bahot taqwiyet mili hai , shukriya ,
umeed hai aaeindah bhi aap meri kawisho'n par apni alimana raey zaroor dein gey , mukhlis dilshadnazmi
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gazal ,
Jun 10, 2008 17:19:11 GMT 5
Post by dilshad on Jun 10, 2008 17:19:11 GMT 5
Muhtram Dilshad Wa alikum us salam mujh par aik qarz tha wo yeh keh aap naen meri ghazal ka tafseeli mutala kiya tha aur tafseeli jawaab bhi ata kiya tha aaj aap ki ghazal paRhi to is ka aik aik lafz basar kiya jo aap ki khidmat maen arz kar raha hoon yeh kehtay howay mujhay khushi mehsoos ho rahi hai keh aap kay haan shairi mehz radeef qafiey ka naam nahen balkay aap bahut napay tulay misray kehtay haen aur shairi kay buniyadi qareenay say aap pori tarha waqif haen
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
acha matla hai
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
dosra misra aisay hota to meray hisaab say bahut acha hota maen ik chaT_Taan tha aur TooT kar taameer tak puhncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
is sher ka dosra misra agar aisay hota to bahut maza aata shutar ghurba ka shaiba na rehta hamaray paoon khud hi halqa e zanjeer tak puhnchay lekin radeef ki majboori hai is liey aap naen isay aisay kaha achi ghazal maen yeh sher acha nahen lag raha baqi aap behtar samajhtay haen
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
is sher maen jugrafiya to hai lekin sheriyat kam nazar aa rahi hai aur abhaam bhi bahut mehsoos ho raha hai ho sakta hai yeh meri kam ilami ho aap is ki wazahat karaen gay to kuch pata chal sakta hai keh aap kiya kehna chah rahay haen
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
bahut acha sher hai
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha
yahan bhi radeef naen aik achay sher ko kha liya hai agar aisay hota to bahut acha hota
kabhi khamoshiaan dilshad nazmi mujh maen dar aaen kabhi aawaz kay pathar meri tashh_heer tak puhnchaen
bahar haal aap ki ghazal parh kar lutf aaya aap kay jawaab ka muntazir rahoon ga takay meray ilm maen izafa ho sakay nadeem sahib salam _o-alaekum . janab , main aap ki iss ibarat se apni baat shuroo karta hoon , yeh kehtay howay mujhay khushi mehsoos ho rahi hai keh aap kay haan shairi mehz radeef qafiey ka naam nahen balkay aap bahut napay tulay misray kehtay haen aur shairi kay buniyadi qareenay say aap pori tarha waqif haenshukriya , moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha daad ke liye shukriya ,\ 2. . takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
dosra misra aisay hota to meray hisaab say bahut acha hota maen ik chaT_Taan tha aur TooT kar taameer tak puhnchamujhey yo'n hi kahena behtar laga , so main ne yo'n hi kaha , aap ne jis tarmeem ke saath samajhne ki koshish ki woh mere kahe huwey misre se kuch alag kafiyet zahir karti hai . main aap ko iss misrey ka darmiyani thaheraao batata hoon , jo shayed ke main ne usse yahaa'n post karte waqt wazah na kiya ho , main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta , tou phir taameer tak pahoncha . 3. hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
is sher ka dosra misra agar aisay hota to bahut maza aata shutar ghurba ka shaiba na rehta hamaray paoon khud hi halqa e zanjeer tak puhnchay lekin radeef ki majboori hai is liey aap naen isay aisay kaha achi ghazal maen yeh sher acha nahen lag raha baqi aap behtar samajhtay haennadeem bhai aap kahaa'n ulajh gaey
hamara se aur hamari se ,,,, aap ne muraad ye le li ke baat jama ke seghey me ho rahi hai , ,, haan yeh sahih hai lekin bhai jab puri qoam ki baat kahi jaey gi tou paao'n hi kahena hoga
qaom ka paao'n
hamarey paao'n nahi main aap ko eak mical pesh karta hoon ,
jab ham kahtey hain ke ,
" chand logo'n ki nadani ne qaom ka sar sharm se jhuka diya " na ke " qaom ke sar sharmindagi se jhuk gaey ""' aap keya kahtey hain iss zimn me 4. falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
is sher maen jugrafiya to hai lekin sheriyat kam nazar aa rahi hai aur abhaam bhi bahut mehsoos ho raha hai ho sakta hai yeh meri kam ilami ho aap is ki wazahat karaen gay to kuch pata chal sakta hai keh aap kiya kehna chah rahay haennadeem sahib ,
har baat khol khol kar nahi bayan ki jati , phir ham sher kah rahe hain , nacr nahi , kuch ilamati kafiyet hai iss sher me ,
9 / 11 ke waqiye ko yaad kijiye , tou sari baat aap ki samajh me aa jaey gi . insha allah 5. kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
bahut acha sher haishukriya ,6. kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha
yahan bhi radeef naen aik achay sher ko kha liya hai agar aisay hota to bahut acha hota
kabhi khamoshiaan dilshad nazmi mujh maen dar aaen kabhi aawaz kay pathar meri tashh_heer tak puhnchaen.bhai aap ke tabsrey ne khoob lutf diya ,
aap ja_baja wahid ko jama ki shakl me dekhney ke khwahish mand hain , lekin main keya karo'n , radeef wagairah ki majboori hargiz nahi thee , ye meri majboori hai ke mujhey yo'n hi kahena thaa , so main ne kaha ,
haan agaz me aap ke iss jumley ne mujhey mayoos kiya , mujh par aik qarz tha bhai isse qarz hargiz na samjhein , yeh tou adbi farz hai ke jo kuch aap ne urdu ke ta_alluq se seekha hai usse dusro'n tak pahonchaein , aur dusro'n se kuch hasil karein ,
mujhey behad khushi huwi ke aap ne apna qeemti waqt meri gazal ke liye diya , insha allah ham aaeindah bhi eak dusrey ki takhleeqaat par apna izhar_e_khayal barmla karein gein , puri sach_chai se aur deyanat dari se , insha allah shukriya
mukhlis
dilshadnazmi[/b
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Post by saeed on Jun 11, 2008 4:30:04 GMT 5
salam _o_alaekum ,
gazal pesh hai , aap ki aaraa ka muntazir hoon ,
dilshadnazmi
moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha
mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha
takab_b_ur inkesar_e_ zaat ki tanweer tak pahoncha
main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha
hamari be hissi jab maslehat ki pusht par aaei hamara paa'on khud hi halqa_e_zanjeer tak pahoncha
falak bosi dhamako'n se huwi thee sarnago'n ,lekin
dhuwaa'n bagdad , kabul , wadiy_e_kashmir tak pahoncha
kamaa'n rakh di mere dushman ne la kar mere qadmo'n par
mera josh_e_shahadat khud machal kar teer tak pahoncha
kabhi khamooshiyaa'n dilshad nazmi mujh me dar aaei'n
kabhi aawaz ka path_thar meri tash_heer tak pahoncha [/color][/color][/b][/quote] Dilshad Nazmi Saheb, Achi kavish hai....aur zameen bhi buhut khubsurat hai ...classical touch ke saath. Mujhey ye ghazal (behr aur qafia) paRhker Jalib ki yeh mash-hoor ghazal yaad aayi: "Sar-e-member woh khwabooN ke mahal ta-meer kartey hain" Acha lagta hai jab kisi naye likhney waley ke kalam se kisi senior ke yaad taza ho. radeef thoRi tang aur kafi mushkil hai isliye baaz ashaar pe abhi nazr-e-sani ki zroorat hai. Is misrey ko dekh lijyega "main ik chat_taan thaa , tuta tou phir ta_a_meer tak pahoncha " lafz chataan hai Chat-taan nahen. Mujhey ghazal ka matla buhut acha laga.. moar_rikh azmat_e_rafta ki jab tafseer tak pahoncha mere kashkol ka shajra meri jageer tak pahoncha Daad hazir hai. Saeed
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